"Eat!", said the serpent,
"You shall know good and evil!"
And - alas - they DID!
A contest entry
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While this is a very interesting write, and it's brevity certainly grabs your attention, I feel that it's too short to say anything special about the story. Thank you for entering this in my contest.
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Interesting poem about the Fall. I liked the 'and alas they did' line because it showed the fall of humanity in quite a dark humourous way. I felt this was quite a sad poem but it was more of a funny poem than anything else. This was a short, well written piece. I liked the way that you led the reader in with the first line, as though the reader was being tempted to read your poem as well. This was good as a short poem but I'd be interested in seeing what you can do with a longer poem on the same subject matter.
Pozo
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Thank you for entering. Short but concisely written. Good luck. Walt
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Knowledge?
Too concise for applause. Tells it exactly how it is, or was, or shall be. Some test God set. And if omniscient, then He knew the result in advance. Chilling.
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