i feel like love is wonderland
it slowly pulls be down
alice is in the rabbit hole
the water makes me drown
the hat has come to cover me
the hare is just a beast
and alice is the queen these days
and couldnt give a least
i try to swim from rabbit hole
the cat pushes me back in
im drowning slowly in her love
and ill try my best to win
let me out of this wonderland
the love here cant be real
tell me all the empty things
that alice makes me feel
put the cat back in the hat
make the hare go back to hole
stop me from leaving wonderland
the queen is on the knoll
she sets there with that stupid cat
and a sniper riffle gun
im escaping from the wonderland
it seems that alice hasnt won
then i trip, a rabbit hole
its filled with waters love
wonderland controlls my fate
i fly now like a dove
thank you alice you are the one
and together we own the land
you took the empty heart of mine
and held it in your hand
i believe in wonderland now
and love that it shall bring
until the day i fall to death
and hear my angel sing
Author notes
ive been in love many times and i feel like i just keep getting pulled back in.. so as soo as i accually got out of love forever.. i found a girl who makes me feel like my life is tripping me out and that everthing is great.. so ill stay with alice in this wonderland of love... thats my metaphore .. option 4 and 8
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Nice story and well-written, but there could be some more action, perhaps?
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I LOVE the wonderland theme, it very awesome metaphor- especially since you also included all the characters the play a role in your life. Very good write
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