To Be
One Must
Not Fit In
To See
Requires
The Unseen
To Survive
Kneel
Be Ready
Fight
To Be
Author notes
Background is thanks to Maatkara
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That was one of those short sweet and to the point poems that hits you like a rock it was deep yet so small. i like your style.
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I liked this!
This was short... but unique! And it had a GREAT meaning to it! You wrote it so well! And it kinda gets one thinking! And you are lucky to get such a background! It is pretty neat! Great write!!!
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This excellent work can be added to still at future times.It's one of those special pieces that can unfold upon gaining new insights.Way to go! Cocamo! -
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Hey I just thought I would like to say its a geat poem but it needs to be a little bit longer.Hey by the way I have a site that has poems. -
WORDS of very deep in meaning. They are full of wisdon and wonder. It took several reads to understand your underlying meaning here and it was a real inspiration I must say. ..KUDOS KAMALA KARI
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OK this is your best yet..I have never fit in...anywhere, except maybe at the wrong place at the wrong time...I am ok just to "be" right now and I have found that since I began to kneel..i have begun to feel...I loved this...such intensity it has for me..Outstanding job!
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I never fit in with anyone,
not even a little bit.
I truly am one, longing to be...
yet always accepting me.
I only see, what I have seen,
and none of what I require, wasn't much to see,
yet I can find beauty in everything.
I stay on my knees,
and I have survived all my days,
because of it.
I have no fight left in me,
I won.
I am now at peace.
Great write, best I have read all day.
I enjoyed this very much.
I am not sure where my comment came from, I just found myself typing it.
An excellent write my friend
Manyblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Interesting. I am one who is opposed to all fighting, whether it is against another or against myself but I understand where the notion that we must fight to be comes from. Interesting write, with moany possible layers and meanings. It's more of a riddle, if you will. Thanks for the brain workout.
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Riddle is correct and " To Be " you must figure it out
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Ok! I will!
You have inspired me with this one! I like how to the point it is and how much it carries an impact! It makes me feel like a warrior! I likey that! I forget to kneel, I forget to fight, I forget that the power within me is greater then anything in this world! I am so glad I stopped to read.......you really got me!
castaway
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Wow I really liked it. It speaks out of me alot. I loved the word usages. it was short but it had great effect. Keep up the good work. It's an inspirational piece you have there. It's really nice, I like it.
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wow, i really like this, it's short, concise, & full of meaning, its actually really inspirational, keep up the totally spiffy work
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Awesome.
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Great write
Very interesting and yet so short. Love your style. (Lisa)
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wow this is very kool. i like it a lot. it may be short but it is still good. and the background looks awesome. i like it. well anyway keep up the good work and dont stop writing poetry.
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Your thoughts are deep, my lovely granddaughter. Hugs, Grandmama
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fitting in is plain and ordinary...being different is what I am, so I look for that in others as well. this is a classic example that shows you do NOT need to write an epic to get the point across. well done Kari
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Everyone must always fighting to be. To be the person (s)he actually is inside and have the capability to let this show to the world.
short, but powerful sweety
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One Must,To Survive,Be Ready,To Fight,yet in an open minded way be first ready to be of peace.Balance Grasshopper.Is the key to survival.Adore the depth of this piece.Balance allows a calming effect too.~~Suseann
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I like the opening: To Be One Must Not Fit In." That describes me because i don't fit in. The message is powerful yet short and simple.
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