The Blackness
Of The Night
Engulfs Me.
Seduces Me.
I Watch
In Quiet
Horror
As Darkness
Emerges
From The
Shadows
Of The
Light.
Cool Breeze
Of Eve
Dances.
In Await
Of The
Coming
Morrow.
Author notes
Option 1 Song # 7 Daylight Fading
A contest entry
- Options Contest, Allowing Prewrites by AlternateCandidate.
500 points, ended August 13, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think that the short, broken line structure takes away from the piece. Also, the capitalization threw me off, and I don't find the piece particularly original. Thank you for entering
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Stealing from dragonfly40, I, too, love it! Great job! The night is my life, for I do not enjoy the sun very much, if at all. I like how almost every line was a different word, putting pressure on reader to get the next line.
Wow, just really good.
Very collected and well placed. The words are not big and intimadating, but deep and passionate.
I think that you definitely nailed the night on the head (wait, WHAT HEAD?!?!? I confuse even myself... sorry). So, once again, great job! I can't even critique it, for there is nothing to improve in. It's just WONDERFUL!
†GP†
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Thank you so much, I've had a crap filled day and you made it end with a smile, so grateful! Kelly
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I LOVE IT
I too am attracted to the night...It's the excitement of fear and the excitement of the dark. You wrote so few words, but caught the pure essence of the dark and it was fantastic.
So creative (plus the picture was just fantastic)
I await the morning, but I crave the night.
DF40
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