brought into a planet of purity,
[your iniquity no longer survives,
just true sunlight,
correct passion,
for it is your exact existence.]
your mind is missing
in the beleaguered feeling that is
innovative, inquisitive and inductive.
your heart wallops
a new beat of life,
showing you’re resurrected from
sinfulness [your soul left unpolluted.]
marine beneath you,
luminosity above you,
the soft chill on your naked skin,
everything is faultless,
all emotions fill your body,
like a glass full of milk
they are supremely twined in
harmony.
Feel Free To Be Critical;
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Yuck! I am so sick right now... Sorry I can't comment really good, but I don't feel well at all! Anyways it is a really good poem and I think you are a really good poet. Great work! Keep writin'!
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there is nothing bad that i can think to say i love this too much, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Well I have no complaints for this poem! I personally thought it flowed really well... had amazing word choice... and a great idea behind what you have written! I wish you the best of luck in your contest... you're bound to do great! Rock on! xoxo Meg
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This font is HORRIBLE
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Lol, ya, I know I just switched it. Is it any easier to read?
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no not really.....the blue hurts my eyes i can't even red it because it hurts hun.
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k, there the white background suits the poem anyways
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ok,
Sorry go work on switching text around
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