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These are the colors of my heart

                The sun and stars all alined up above heavens love,
          I feel the sun beating down on my face,
        Feeling the love.
              The rain falls down
            I can see it all
                  The beauty of love
                These are the colors of my heart.
        The love that I feel you sing
            I want to know you even more
                  And now I feel
                      sad.
              These are the color of my heart.
          You may think that I'm sweet
          And that I feel pain
                  I cry everyday
              And night
              The time I see your smile
                  I feel beautiful
                    These are what makes me live.

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  • Crazy-Dan
    February 2, 2007

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    1st line, wow, that's the first time i ever saw that kind of rhyme skeem, very unique.
    9th and 10th line, i like how you can almost hear the elipces, its unique and i like it.
    The last 3 lines, made me smile and that's hard to do, for some reason it gave me hope; it made me smile!

    This is hugely unique and wonderful overall. And the title definately is mixed in there, even though i admitt that i can't understand it