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What Can You Say

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A candle blowing softly in a breeze

reminds me of a clouded moon trying to

come to grips with the evening news.

 

Life is taken for granted as it's beauty fades.

time washes away the needs and all

that is left is realitiy.

 

Can you truthfully say,"I smelled a rose today,

I saw the first sprays of spring, through a

Winter storm?"

 

Did you give an 'I love you' and mean it

from your heart?

Stopped to say hello, to someone you did not know?

Gave a hug just to someone in need?

 

Where do you fit in this game of life, are you

playing it to the full, or do you stop every so often,

just to smell the dying of the rose...?                                                                 

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  • redmarkonthewall
    March 2, 2007

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    Deep

    This is more what I was looking for by way of deep. Some people just don't quite get it. DEEP! You my freind understand! Good write, and thanks for entering. Good luck!


  • -Ink Artist-
    February 23, 2007

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    Incredibly poignant and prolific piece you've created here, Tender wolf. This analysis of the true importance in our ever-so-short lives is amazing. You've managed to capture all the little things we take for granted and entwine them with the reality that it only takes a second to notice their significance. Beautifully written from deep inside the heart and it shows! Sorry I'm late on your hoodwinking...I wasn't able to be online yesterday, so I apologize. Much love to you from this Poetic Bandit...


    ~Lori


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    February 22, 2007

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    Well, I have stopped to smell roses and given hugs. I always tell the people I love that I love them. I love your analogies.


  • tawk gold member
    February 22, 2007

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    We should all stop and smell the roses! Life is short to not appreciate all that is in it. You have brought to mind an excellent point. Enjoy life to it's fullest for it may be gone tomorrow. Excellent write so full of emotion. Excellent flow

    Have a wonderful day!
    You have just been Hood-Winked


  • Spiritvision angel
    February 7, 2007

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    I really enjoyed reading this wonderful write of everyday life and everyone's option to simply be kind hearted. To help our fellow man. Great subject and write sister.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 6, 2007
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    Intriguing yet Spectatular

    Excellent poem all round. very well ropunded and masterfully penned. very much enjoyable to read and a very fun filled poem all round. keep up the Grrrrrreat work and keep on writing. Sincerely, Tiger


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 6, 2007
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    Good Write

    very enjoyable all round write and very fun to read. incredible poem all round written with such a deep interreptation of what poetry is like. Great poem all round and very much enjoyable! Tiger


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    February 3, 2007

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    a poke in the eye to the blind..

    A very powerful nudge to those who so easily forget.
    'Just one second of your time, could mean a whole lifetime to another.'

    The three simple words 'I Love You' can be like reading a whole book to the reciever, if spoken with feeling.

    A strangers new write, visited and commented on, means the world to them, a simple 'hello' just the same.

    And those endearing little 's always create a smile on the face of someone who needs cheering up.

    we are all players in the game, it just depends whether you are on the winning side, or sitting on the bench, watching. great write Sis, your Tenderness shows well here.



  • alleyes
    February 3, 2007
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    honest and through provoking


  • calvspw
    February 3, 2007
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    words of wisdom

    truly spoken, can anyone truly say they did this or even took the time to think until you bring it to our attention, I think many people don't even think about life, and what it truly means. very wise words my friend and thought provoking. MOON

  • deleteit
    February 2, 2007

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    I love this Auntie. It speaks volumes of how we sometimes just merely exist in this life. Not to mention the things we take for granted. A very thought provoking write


  • Spiritual Nature
    February 2, 2007

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    Beautiful piece with a reality check tucked in. I loved the first line, so real, and still so beautiful. "Life is taken for granted as it's beauty fades. time washes away the needs and all that is left is reality." "But where do you fit in this game of life,.." I hope I gave the hug where needed and truly felt I love you. Hope you are feeling better today.


  • freespirit51
    February 2, 2007
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    WOnderful piece my SISTER. Very insightful indeed. I loved it. Very enjoyable write.

    Can you truthfully say,"I smelled a rose today,
    I saw the first sprays of spring, through a
    Winter storm?"

    I must say these were my favorite lines. Excellent work.


  • Desire gold member
    February 2, 2007

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    Aaaaaaaaaw-

    Each day is priceless and cannot be give back for time is just a continuum...
    One encounter makes a difference to someone~
    somewhere out there...especially that smile
    Contagious and one of a kind...
    Beautiful words You have penned my Friend~
    Love the emotions You speak from the Heart
    Very powerful!

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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