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My Shadow

It is a shadow
Of a life gone by
A past that I disown
A mistake that haunts me
Even in daylight
And in crowds of souls
I see the shadow following me
Never letting me go
I tried to run
I tried to hide
All I can do, is to deny

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  • Fire Lives In Me
    February 8, 2007

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    Well, I've finally looked at this enough that I can give you a good comment. First of all, I love this poem. Even though it's short, it managed to capture the idea of being haunted by your past pretty well. Considering the fact that it is a short poem, I might go back and try to substitute some more vivid words (for example, stalking instead of following). Other than that, it flows pretty well, but a few changes here and there could bring about an even better flow (at least, in my opinion). All in all, very good poem.