Our love
was a sunset,
euphoric colours fell
from jagged rock horizons of
false hope.
In a list
A contest entry
- Cinquain by individuality.
600 points, ended February 2, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Battle of the Bronze by th3sl4y3r.
580 points, ended June 14, 2007, 107 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
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these lines are amazing... "euphoric colours fell
from jagged rock horizons of
false hope." so much imagery and emotion in this write, you have done a wonderful job of writting this in such few words... well done!!
thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
peace and light always. -
I suck at cinqains, but clearly, you don't, or I wouldn't be commenting!
I still love you.
looooove you.
love you.
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Love you too!
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I like that
how you call a sunset "euphoric colours" falling -
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Thanks for this lovely comment.
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awesome write.........
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Thanks.
Your pic is so cute!
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Oh my , you missed the forest for the trees , When you get to heaven god will say but Red , "Those were not ...
( jagged rock horizons of false hope )
I put the rocks there so you could climb up high enough to reach your dreams" .
Storm
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And if I opened my eyes I might realise the night sky is full of stars and moonlight.
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Sounds like good advise for me , Storm
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Hey this was really good too...Congrats on the bronze
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Thanks for your lovely comment and applause!
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This is unusual.
Congratulations on your trophy. :-)
Well deserved.
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Thanks ever so much for your comment and applause.
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a good poem, works nicely here
i thank you kindly for entering your poetic piece and good luck to you in this contest - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Thanks for your beautiful comment Individuality. Have fun with the contest.
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This is gorgeous. Such a perfect description in so few words. The comparison is tragically beautiful. A fading sunset representing a fading love.... Amazing.
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Thanks for the comment and applause!
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Nice
The quantity in text is nothing compared to its quality. Good job, I like it.
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Thanks for you great comment and applause! Much appreciated.
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Comparing love to a sunset is beautiful but the ending seems sad with the "false" in there. So I suppose it's a confused emotion ... maybe
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Thanks for the comment. I actually wanted it a sad poem, the love falling off the edge of the horizon... I'll see what I can do to make that a little clearer. Thanks again for your comment.
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