The truth, the lies,
The stories, the tries,
Impressing me-that's not enough,
Because I'm sick of all these stuff.
We're just too damn of a bother
To think of each-other...
Wait, can I use "we"?
Or is it just "you" and "me"?
What's been left untold
Is killing me, and now
I just feel the need to talk;
Even if I don't know how...
A contest entry
- †Emotions† Winner Takes All! by DarlingUnwrapMexx.
300 points, ended February 2, 2007, 9 entries
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Please let me know your opinions
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This is normally what comes out of a relationship ending and from what I know is normally the biggest source of pain
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That's nice. Good luck!
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Nice job. I like the last stanza the best. Thanks for entering.
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nice write
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This is amazing. I love it. It is so full of emotion, and I feel I can truly relate to it. I was nearly in tears reading this. I really loved the lines
Wait, can I use "we"?
Or is it just "you" and "me"?
This is definitely one of the best poems I've read so far. Thank you for your entry, and the best of luck in my contest.
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Oh, thank you very much! I am delighted it brought so much feeling to you! I truly, truly am, because this is the exact way I felt when writing it.
Thanks again!
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Very nicely written and I like the 3 for 1 bonus. I liked the idea of "can I use we" because sometimes that's the problem with love that it isn't a we it's just two seperate people. Thanks for entering.
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Ha..this is good. I like how you don't want to say 'we' but just 'you' and 'me'. Nice nice. Sometimes talking does help and sometimes it is hard to figure out how to word your thoughts. But you did good in this poem! Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Very well wrotten thanks for sharing this with us
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very good... thanx for entering.... wish you luck!
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Powerful words that struck a chord, well written. Good luck in the contest!
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I know this is a re-write and for another contest, but still has some words that fit what I feel; the fact that I don't want her to be sorry...I just want her to be honest with me. thanks for the entry.
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A multitude of emotions riding together in this... Very real and wonderfully written. Good luck!
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I liked this alot. I truely love the end line, very powerful way to end, very captivating way to keep a reader interested.
I feel although it is a part one to an untold story, which is good, for it makes you wonder how it ended.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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yup, sure does fit. A love we should not have loved, is a love that is willing to hurt us.
good luck in my contest
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I like it.
felt like this recently. -
The anger is wonderfully strong in this; my favourite line being, "Wait, can I use we?" The bitterness is just so strong in that line.
Nicely done.
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I really like how you wrote this poem and I also like the words you used. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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