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A kiss alighted on my tear marked cheek last night,
soft,warm and gentle, sent by whom I can’t recite,
while in the arms of fitful sleep, bathed in the moon's soft light.
A brief encounter though it was, from a lover wishing to be,
a kiss that had traveled great distances especially for me,
over many lands and oceans and the ever restless sea.
We must meet before Time, throws its’ smothering cloak
and unite our bonds as one, before tenfold I have woke,
or wait in wonder ever more, once enchantment has been broke.
Oh please Lord release these chains so poignant in my life,
that hold me lonely throughout time, devoid of a loving wife,
for this abandoned heart is unfilled, as if cut out with a knife.
Tonight I will lay again to welcome another searching kiss,
to savor the moment grand, is something I dare not miss,
for dreams of love await me, as impatience grows for wedded bliss.
The fingers of fate can be fickle, pitiless in matters such as these,
whether standing before defiant, or down on bended knees,
or a lost kiss vainly searching, carried by the wandering breeze.
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Author notes
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A contest entry
- Prewrites Galore and Nothing More by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended February 22, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Need To Cry My Everloving Brains Out!! by Angel With No Halo.
525 points, ended February 16, 2007, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best Prewrite by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended February 25, 2007, 105 entries
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334 points, ended April 3, 2007, 36 entries
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450 points, ended May 18, 2007, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Meritocracy Blues by neoprose.
772 points, ended May 4, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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Because of its length, it probably won't win, but I love it anyway
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Who is counting anyway ?? lol I don't ...
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thank you for entering =]
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thnak you for entering and good luck in the contest with this very emotional read
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Aww! Very touching write full of such painful and tender expressions of longing. Something I know many can relate to. You're rhyme is fantastic, smooth , and meter perfect! Wonderful work, string tugging. Thank you so much for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest.
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This is such a beautiful piece! I really loved reading this. Congrats on the honorable mentions. Good job!
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so romantic
but sad wishing all to find someone to end this romantic nightmare...great use of words ...simply marvelous...I hope the best for you...keep up the great writing ...that I will never match...lol...peace Katie -
This is full of beautiful flowing rhyme and wishful longing, maybe you better remember the 'wick' blowing up that may keep the longing at bay for awhile lol, although I do know of which you speak, and I wait for someone except I know who that someone is, he just isn't in the same hemisphere at the moment *sigh, oh well back to dreamland again
Love, C
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This is beautifully written. I could picture each line as i read it.
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Welcome to the finalist's list. ^_^
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Nice rhyme, nice alliteration, nice overall. I'm sorry- it was sweet but it didn't hit me hard as the passion you tried to communicate. It is certainly better thatn others in the contest but... It is a little too conventional.
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This is a lovely write. I especially love the part "for dreams of love await me, as impatience grows for wedded bliss." Beautiful. Thanks for entering and good luck.
~Raine~
**I'd give applause but I have used all of it today...sorry...
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. This is a nice little write with decent flow. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
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PUZZLED
I am puzzled because I cannot find my entry in amongst the entries shown in your competition. It must have been entered because I was notified by you that the contest had ended yet it doesn't appear (as far as I can see), so I assume I was removed or disqualified. This leads to the question of why ?? Look forward to your reply.
Bazza -
A hint of a long distance romance here, and a poignant wish written almost as a dream. And here we are, with those feathers that drop to the depths of being, where angels fear to tread .... and "the lost kiss vainly searching."
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Maybe it was just a figment of desire .... who knows ? ....
Thank you for your wonderful comments which are very much appreciated and when garnished with such generous applause they make me more encouraged and inspired to do better. You have ben very busy reading my work and I really am honoured that someone with your ilk has read a few more. I would be honoured if you added me to your favourites list for I know then that some of my work would receive honest comments. I am adding you to mine. Thanks again, I am currently on the road in my motor home and am running out of power and need re-charging for the sun is not strong enough to generate yet (6:00 am)
Reagrds,
Barry
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This is wondefully heartfel and purely lovely. I am not partial to rhyme.. but this flowed very very well. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest hon!!
~Krys~
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You have a lovely heart. This poem is simply amazing, love is a difficult subject...i'm young, but i've been in love, and i am in love. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a lovely, heartfelt and personal write. I'm very sorry for your loss but I thank you for sharing your talent. I hope the process of writing down your feelings was therapeutic for you, and I must say that it is encouraging to read something that is a true celebration of love, rather than the perfect, shallow celluloid version we are innundated with from Hollywood every day. Once again, thank you.
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Makes Me Sigh My Friend!!!!!
Oh Barry, Your poem was so full of heartfelt words. I know exactly how you feel. I too long to feel the warmth of arms around me and the tender kisses of love again. You always tell me to hold onto the good memories I have of love and dream of them. I still am waiting for that dream to come true. Your poem brings a tear to my eye as I read of your longing. Deep in my heart, still I long for what can not be. Sometimes love does hurt forever. Barry your words are so touching. Dream on my dreamer. Let us fly through the sky and meet in our lonely dreams and be happy together for that brief moment. Blessings to you. Love ya a bunch my big brother Bazza bear.
You take care
Sandy
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aahh Sandy, who says it wont come true ?? It is better to imagine that IT HAS NOT COME TRUE YET !!!! T Iwrote how I feel and I suppose the bottom line is to keep the feelings under control and let them mature gradually, for if one jumps in too fast it can easily become a one way love affair which (as we both have learnt) have no chance of success, so that is why I put the iea in that it could also be a wayward lost kiss searching. We must understand that all love affairs are not destined for success so to hold back a little and see if it grows on both sides of the fence is very important. I believe that Hope is always eternal and so it WILL happen, just a matter ofwhen..... Love ya little sister.. BigBrudderBaz..
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It is an amazing poem, flows nicely as well.
Great imagery and lovely word choice.
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Thank you for your comments and applause which are much appreciated.
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softly smiling at such a thought. my dear bazza, this is lovely. just lovely. worthy of gold. a lost kiss - I believe kisses know exactly where they're going and few ever go astray. the kisser always knows to whom she is throwing her kisses. this write just fluffs up my heart a bit knowing there are people out there who feel this way and as I mend hopefully i'll find one of them.
all the best to you and yours.
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Ooh. I like the feeling and emotions of this poem. I like your vocabulary use; it really adds to the mood and feel. This is a poem, I feel, that almost anyone could relate to, and that's truly great. I only have one suggestion for revision in your poem. You use somewhat of an excessive amount of commas. Commas add feel to the poem when used properly, but in some cases, like your third stanza (just to be specific), the comma after "Time" disrupts your poem's flow.
Thanks dearly for entering my contest. Good luck!
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Thank you for your applause and comments and with regards to the commas, they are designed to create a slight pause so that the underlying feelings are not swept away if one tends to read too fast. A contentious point really because I receive ctisicsm both ways. My poems are not meant for a live performance but instead are 'picture poems' that use the imagery and sound of words etc. and therefore speed and flow are important too. I usually have my audience sit with closed eyes and just listen and if you get someone to read it aloud as you do this, you will find an even more vivid picture forms in the mind. Reading too fast prevents the pictures from forming properly.Anyway, I am still develping this technique and will go back and check out your suggestions. Thanks for your interest and comments and I look forward to seeing the winners list on this very large competition. Good work. I would be interested in receiving your comments on this. Barry.
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Bazza, this is such a lovely poem.
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Thankyou.
Thanks Mairi, I was happy with it but it is getting closer to what I want to write (when I am in the mood) so I am glad you liked it. Been researching sonnets, but a little put off with them but I will persist a bit longer. I hate rules and strict convention and would rather write as I feel with a melody entwined and formeb by the words... hard to describe but I know what I mean, expressing it is the problem.
Thanks for your comments and applause,
Warmest regards,
Barry
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The fingers of fate can be fickle, pitiless in matters such as these,
whether standing before defiant, or down on bended knees,
or a lost kiss vainly searching, carried by the wandering breeze.
I can see here your heart behind every word watching the meaning whether it portrays its agenda of love or not and this is cream of this write my friend...It is truely so heartfelt emotional work scripted by the heart of the poet only...The sentiments of the poem are so innocently stating the universal need of the soul ...the structure of this work is indeed so much powerful in terms of the intensity of love... A great work is here...
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Thankyou PrabhuDayal, for such a wonderfully perceptive and sincere comment as is always received from you. I appreciate your taking the time and for garnishing it with a very generous applause. Thank you my friend for you have made my day very happy and stoked the fires of inspiration. I hope you have a nice day too.
Warmest regards,
Barry
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this is absolutely precious. completely and totally precious. thank you for sharing your heart and talent with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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Precious !! wow !!
Thank you for your lovely comment and applause and I dont think I have ever had a poem called 'precious', which I take as a sincere comliment, and makes the writing of it an even more pleasing experience.
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a very beautiful statement of our desire to be loved...A thoroughly enjoyable read it flows and rhymes very well. I do feel the occasional comma is misplaced, which may cause small hiccups in flow, but otherwise this is a wonderful piece. Of course, I'm no grammar expert and could be wrong too lol. Very well done.
Rory
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Thanks mate.
Thanks mate for your great comments and applause. The commas are intended (as is ther correct use) to slow or slightly (very slight, niot stopped ) pause, to help in the rhythm and flow and the melody I have tried to build in. Mainly because one tends to read fast on this site because of the amount to be read, so I put physical signs (commas) there to do this. If spoken aloud, I think you will see what I mean as this is the best way to bring these things above out into the overall effect. Anyway, that was the intention, if it works or not for others is one of the necessities of requesting comments and appraisal. I would appreciate your comments again after readingthe poem aloud ( to an imagined audience) and tell me if I am correct or not. Thanks again mate. Appreciate your help.
Warmest regards,
Barry
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To dream of love, that takes up most of my night and you know it is always the most perfect kind, for there are no arguments, no humdrum things to get in the way, just pure love. Maybe love is best just this way
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Thanks Cannonsfire.
It is great to stir the seeds of passion by dreaming of love all night but the other senses like touch and feel go wanting, and therefore can be just what it is .. a dream ... a fantasy .... that's why when a fantasy is lived out it ceases to exist, but can be replaced with the full bag of senses that makes it ten times more powerful ... lol It's nice to dream but reality is supreme....
Thanks for your usual lovely comments and applaus. They are so much appreciated.
Barry.
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I WISH YOU MANY SWEET DREAM, BROTHER!
Tonight I will lay again to welcome another searching kiss,
to savor the moment grand, is something I dare not miss,
for dreams of love await me, as impatience grows for wedded bliss.
The fingers of fate can be fickle, pitiless in matters such as these,
whether standing before defiant, or down on bended knees,
or a lost kiss vainly searching, carried by the wandering breeze.
I hope and pray that the day and night will come again for you - when you feel the touch of a loving woman's touch and embrace and the warmth of her lips, tongue, and beautiful as she shares her sweet kisses, her heart, her soul, and all her love with you, my friend - BUT until then - may your dreams be as sensual, tender, and sweet as the soulful lines of this fine poem!
Peace & Love, Mate!
Earl.
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Earl
Thanks Earl for your lovely comments and wishes as well as the generous applause. I appreciate the time and effort you put into commenting as well, thanks a million mate.
Barry
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Bazza your dreams are surely something worth falling asleep for. Though to awaken only to find that this was all they were is a deflationary feeling I love dreaming for there i can move into realms unknown in reality.I often wonder if some of it is retained memory handed down through our genes As in dreams i am familiar with all that occurs even though i know when i wake that this is impossible Another wonderful piece of reading Excellent
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GULP!!!!!!
Dear me!!!! this tears at the heartstrings.So beautiful and yet so sad.Ah!!!! I see below somebody loves you.We all do, Ros
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This was great. It was so well written as your tenderness just flows so gently with every word you write. Your poems are like stories unfolding with such beauty and the rhyming seems so natural and not forced at all. I loved the line "tonight I will lay again to welcome another searching kiss,". That was so beautifully written. Lovely write.
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Thank you for those kind comments and applause. Glad you enjoyed it.
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This was very moving. Thank you.
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hi my lovely daddy,
This is a very beautiful piece. It's a little sad, but I'll remove its sadness with my love for you.
LOVE YOU
Shahrzad
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Hi Scarlet..
Hi Sweety, just logged on to see if anyone read my latest poem A Kiss in the Night ... sounds like you and I.lol Exceeded my data limit and will be brief until Feb 8th. Have to luv ya and leave ya .... fantasies again ..
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