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Colored Orbs

Multi colored orbs pierce the darkness
Like summer fireflies caught in a jar,
So pleasing to my eyes, I'm amazed
In my minds eye, I wonder what they are

I lie down on my back in the carpeted grass
A sweet evening breeze causes the trees to dance,
The colored orbs seem to surround me
I could lie forever in this trance

My mind doesn't comprehend what my eyes see
Is it possible it is playing tricks,
This feeling is oh so relaxing
Like a drug addict getting a fix

I must have dozed off at some point
For when I awoke, the sun had arose,
Euphoria was the feeling all over me
Such a calm from my head to my toes

So was I dreaming of colored orbs
Did a ufo swoop down, out of the dark sky,
Or was it that valium I swallowed
Tonight, I must give this another try
                                        POETDONTKNOWIT
                                          2/2/2007

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I wrote this in about fifteen minutes for the contest. I had to type fast, for I keep getting kicked off my computer. It may not make a lick of sense.
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  • Florida Sunshine
    May 29, 2007

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    Oh, you know sometimes whenn the words are just falling into place your amazed... Sometimes I am just so sleepy~ I'll write my best work~ When I put the most into it~ no one seems to like it~ Weird hun... good luck to you in the contest!


  • FaintWhispers
    May 18, 2007

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    Amazing, I thought it was really good.
    Even though it was a prewrite
    I think it fit pretty good with the image.
    Great job & thanks for entering.


  • CherylAnn
    March 17, 2007
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    Cool

    bet it was that valium
    great write...I really enjoyed it alot!!!
    your words had me just beating this story...Wanting even more of it.Love this type of write.Grand picture of orb's dear.
    Good Luck in your contest
    Blessings
    ~Cheryl~


  • 0darkAngel0
    February 23, 2007

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    i enjoyed reading this one
    i kinda picture in my mind those colorful orbs
    made me wonder... (if that pill can really give you this feeling?) i should try it then
    thank you for sharing


  • x Bright Eyes x
    February 13, 2007

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    your first stanza brilliant opening loved it also loved the imagery in this just amazing loved the description was perfect
    xxxxx M xxxxx

  • interframe
    February 9, 2007

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    Very nice

    I think perhaps we are of the same mind in some respects.
    Thanks for your comments on Xanax Dream.


  • briareus gold member
    February 8, 2007

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    I'm glad to find that someone else has had this experience, as I did in California a few months before the Loma Prieta earthquake, The 'orbs' were like orange-to-white-colored balls of gas rising above the walls of an old hotel, walls that were my horizon that evening. They kept floating upward, I never tried to count them, there were too many.


  • Whoochi gold member
    February 6, 2007

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    This has great feeling and imagery.. I imagined myself laying back on the grass and seeing all sorts of colors...Very descriptive... made me smile...and the last lines were funny..."was it that valium..." hahha

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