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Lies # 1-6

Wrestling with her own passions and desires
she succumbs to sleep.
Into her mind visions of
intertwining and meshing bodies creep.
She says she doesn't want him
says she can resist.
But the things that attract her
are far too long to list.
The way her body responds
as she looks into his eyes.
Yet she tells herself
all of these lies.
Tells herself she doesn't want
those strongs arms to hold
the body that has felt so cold.
This is lie # 1 she's told.
Lie #2- she'll never love again
doesn't NEED a man.
Yet he touches her heart
like nobody can.
Lie #3- she's not lonely
she's just fine by herself.
She's taken that part of her that needs someone
and put it on a shelf.
It's grown dusty
picked up only once in a while.
Puts it back down when she feels
the evil way the last man did defile
the innocence and purity
of the essence of her being.
Didn't know or didn't care
about the damage he was seeing.
He just kept hurting her
over and again.
Never again will she go back
to where she's been.
She makes one man suffer
for the sins of the last.
Makes him deal with what happened
to her in the past.
She wrestles with
the nightmares that haunt her.
Gets lost in the dreams
of passion that come after.
Turns on her side
sweat dripping from her brow.
She whimpers, is it ecstacy
or fear that is gripping her now?
She wakes in
a completely breathless state.
Reaches for the pillow next to her
that takes the place of her mate.
She hugs it tight
and let's just one tear fall.
She's gonna be strong
in spite of it all.
She lays there in bed
and tells herself lies # 4, 5, and 6
and the clock on the nightstand
just ticks
and ticks.

Author notes

I chose option # 6 for the contest. ~*~ Lost in the lies ~*~ So often as women we lie to ourselves and allow the men in our past that hurt us to destroy any happiness we may have in the future. Out of fear, we deny obvious opportunities for a good thing, through telling ourselves lies.

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  • going...going
    February 5, 2007

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    I really liked this poem~~I think it kind of describes where my lobster (they mate for life) was before we crashed into each other on AP a few months back. We both had a "no relationships for me" attitude before we encountered each other but when I suggested that we meet (we only live about an hour apart) she started getting cold feet. She is a tough little soldier, as she likes to say, but a great deal of that bluster was built to keep her safe from future harm...she has written about her pain, betrayal, and abandonment very eloquently in her poetry, but I knew the value of what I had found and I wasn't about to let her past keep us apart...and it never will.

    Excellent write~~great job and God bless!

    dp


  • Sacrificial Love
    February 3, 2007

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    Thank you so much...

    for coming and reading Massy (I hope I spelled that right).

    I think as women, we all have experienced a point in time during our life when we have lied to ourselves... running from reality...whether it be something good...or something bad...

    Reality is that women and men alike run from what is good for them very often...making the choice to be miserable rather than being at peace...for sometimes the peace is deafening...and we can't realize we deserve it.

    Thank you again sweet Massy

    Bonded by love for one...

    xoxo
    Sahabah


  • Vernal Bloom
    February 3, 2007

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    You are completely right, Lady! Your poem reminded me of a note I wrote in my memory notebook. I wrote we always are trying to lie. When we don’t love someone, we makes lies of loving and again we love someone, we ignore our inner feelings. Such colorful lies are not hard to understand by me as one of women. The end was so good.
    Thank you for sharing with us all the best in the contest :-)

    ~Massy~


  • the Eye of Truth
    February 2, 2007

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    First of all, thank you for going back, and reading the rules once again....now, to the poem....WOW, I love it! It's very deep, and the concept is amazing, I can't think of a better one...I was not expecting this when I clicked the link, but it's what I got, and I am very glad...The rhyming is done great, not force, yet following a nice pattern, good job with that! I really don't know what else to say, the I enjoyed the title too, and your author notes pull the whole piece together with the reasoning behind that, I like notes like that. And the ending:

    She hugs it tight
    and let's just one tear fall.
    She's gonna be strong
    in spite of it all.
    She lays there in bed
    and tells herself lies # 4, 5, and 6
    and the clock on the nightstand
    just ticks
    and ticks.

    It leaves the whole piece in suspense, yet calm. Very, very well done, I enojoyed this piece very much, and the flow was great, I didn't stutter, and I like that very much, lol, it makes it much more smooth. Great write.

    Thanks for the entry!
    Good luck

    ¤BLONDIE¤

    • Sacrificial Love
      February 2, 2007
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      OH MY GOSH...

      You have no idea how good you have made me feel tonight

      That piece meant so much to me...
      and you really have made me feel like I did good

      Thank you so much for breaking down your critique...and telling me exactly what was good. I really appreciate you!!!

      Continue to inspire

      Sahaba

  • the Eye of Truth
    February 2, 2007
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    Check the rules please

    I have read your piece, I will say,it's very good... but I will not critique or consider it until you read my rules once again, and make the needed correction, thank you for the entry though, and once the correction is made, you will definately have a chance, IM me if you think you've corrected it. Thank you!

    ¤BLONDIE¤


  • Cannonsfire
    February 2, 2007

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    You keep singing my song dear beloved one, I know exactly how this feels, matter of fact i still do it to a certain extent, I tell myself I have no one to answer to except myself and that is grand until I need a cuddle or someone to talk to over a coffee or by a fire, then I see the painful truth. Alone is not so good all the time. Love you and your words.


  • Iohagh
    February 2, 2007

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    More wow now

    Darling

    I do all these
    hating myself later on
    why cannot I please
    stop singing this song.

    Smooshies

    Janet

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