You smiled at me today
When you saw me in the rain
We laughed at each other
Because we both looked the same
Standing in the down pour
Getting drenched right through
Water dripping from our hair
Our shirts becoming see through
But we make no move to go
As any normal person would
And I don’t know why
But I know we should
[You’re pushed against me]
Suddenly you’re in my arms
I suppose I caught you before you fell
But when you smile a mischievous grin
It’s hard for me to tell
The schoolyard becomes a blur
Life goes on unseen
We’re oblivious to it all
Every single detail, everything
We’re close, only inches away
Your nose nudges mine
Our breath mingles in the air
Your eyes sparkle and shine
[You kiss me]
And then we are two boys
Kissing in the rain
Author notes
Hi! It was raining today! lol. That's why I wrote this. hehe. Tell me what you think.
Shady Lane
A contest entry
- be my valentine (number 1) by honey bear.
450 points, ended February 4, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awwwwww
god what a fantisy. i wish it culd happen to me. the poem took my breath away. i had to stop and rmind my self to breath even tho i didnt want to. love the poem. -
aw thats so cute ^_^
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i think kissin in the rain is so romantic. i cant wait to try it! ^_^ cool poem
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WOW!
This is AWESOME! I love it. Such tenderness and heartfelt passion here. Fantastic, really!
<3BeautifulDisaster9
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Thanks heaps for your comment!!!! Muchly appreciated!!
Shady Lane
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HEARWARMING!
tenderness, innocence, a haunting image of 'two boys kissing in the rain', and a fertile imagination to fill in the secene of what came later between 'two boys'...
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lol...thanks for your comment!
"...and a fertile imagination to fill in the secene of what came later between 'two boys'...mmmmmmm, yum! lol
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thank you for entering with this lovely and very tender write. full of fun and innocence as a first love should be, this write definately captures the moment, good luck in the contest with this loving poem
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Thanks heaps!!!!
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awwwww
"the rain on the outside compares nothing to the rain in my heart"
lolll
oh how i wish i could tell him..
this poem made me think of him, we had many moments caught in the rain.. wait a minute, im not a boy..
oh well..
i'm off myself..
cazza
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lol. No, you're not a boi...I hope! *scratches head confused* lol
Tommy
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Beautiful write. I could have enjoyed it all the more if there weren't people staring in the background (always judging...oy). Innocence is bliss.
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Hey, thanks for your comment! Glad you liked it!
Shady Lane
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Ahh...Innocent love. Childish but sweet...danmit why did you have ta break my heart!?! T_T Oh sorry. I love the poem. Simple and innocent , very nice.
Unfaithfully Your's
Of Blood and Tears
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Hey. Thanks heaps for your comment, I really appreciate it. Glad you liked it!!
Shady Lane
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A good poem. Shows the beauty of innocent love (if it is love, it may be infatuation or whatever, I don't know what you meant it to be) and the simplicity of words just add to the effect.
Well written.
Peace
x x
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Hey, thanks for the comment. It's not meant to be love...but just a little moment in life where the boundries of innocence are tested.
Shady Lane
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