In one night you changed my life,
I thought you loved me,
I thought you cared.
You murdered my soul,
You took my every being.
But, all the while you never cared.
You took me for a ride,
Just to talk you said.
But you wanted much more.
You and your friend,
Drunk off your minds,
Trying to convince me to say "yes"
I told you "NO!"
You tugged and you ripped,
And you laughed in my face.
I cried and pleaded,
You said come on lets have fun,
You laugh in my face some more.
That night you murdered me,
Never to be the same,
I will never trust again.
I will never be happy again,
You are,
You got away with it, my friends in blue...
Author notes
This story is sad but oh so very true....
Written June 11th, 2003
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I am really sorry about what happened with you, and I'm glad to see that you chose to express your emotions through poetry rather than something less healthy for you. I have to admit, this is a terrific poem, full of emotion, and very eprsonal. Thank you for sharing such a personal piece with us.
~Anastasia -
Such strong emotion in this piece and reminded me of my poem 'Not Me'. Although, mine is not true and your was...I'm sorry there are people like that running around, but sadly they exist, most without due justice. Justice is coming though. Blessings,
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Intense piece. It really burns me up to know people like that our in our society, let alone running and protecting it...GRrrrrrrrr!!!!! Fabulous job on this hun. I know there is nothing to say to take that pain away, but I do feel it and wish time to fade it from you forever. blessed be
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Makes me want to kill that guy, because that's how they are, argh, but omg that was such a good poem I was almost in tears.
Abby -
I'm soooooo sorry... I have almost been there myself... its horrifying...
~All 28~ -
awsum write...umm if u dont mind..did this happen to u..or a friend...cuz i really didnta catch that...and i
am very sorry it happened
life has horrors and it sux to
be the one to have to go thru them
but stay strong live long
ttyl~jess -
This is a great write. I loved every last line of it, and I am sorry you had to go through that. I know it really must be hard on you. And the fact that you can make a poem out of it, is very admirable!
God bless!
~Amanda -
This is really good! I had to read it because I wrote a poem called "Murder of my Soul" but it is nothing like this! and this is so much better than mine! Sorry that it happened but I understand. I really like this write...reminds me alittle well kind of alot of my poem "Motionless" so yeah. This is good write. Really enjoyed reading it even if it did bring pain in my heart.
Deadly Dying.
Lady -
Very nice piece... I am sorry that this happened though. Great strong emotion! I think you want it to be "loved" in the second line, however. GOOD LUCK!!!
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