Despite the lessons I have learned
I know that I don’t know
The praise and blame that I have earned
To karmic laws I owe
Each joy brings grief with certainty
Each glory brings deceit
When pride turns to humility
My path will be complete
When books no more fulfil my soul
When knowledge seems absurd
When peacefulness becomes my goal
When wisdom is preferred
The dual world of ignorance
I gladly leave behind
Embracing purest innocence
Surrender weary mind
Eternal Joy and Peace I claim
All lessons I’ll un-learn
Transcending wheel of praise and blame
Immortal Bliss to earn
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Immortal Bliss to earn
Transcending wheel of praise and blame
All lessons I’ll un-learn
Eternal Joy and Peace I claim
Surrender weary mind
Embracing purest innocence
I gladly leave behind
The dual world of ignorance
When wisdom is preferred
When peacefulness becomes my goal
When knowledge seems absurd
When books no more fulfil my soul
My path will be complete
When pride turns to humility
Each glory brings deceit
Each joy brings grief with certainty
To karmic laws I owe
The praise and blame that I have earned
I know that I don’t know
Despite the lessons I have learned
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Author notes
metered mirror-rhyme and
mirror-painting "wholehearted" by maa
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METERED MIRROR-RHYME in alternating iambic tetrameter and iambic trimeter, with an abab cdcd rhyme-scheme
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A contest entry
- The Balance of Life by Moon Stained Silver.
900 points, ended March 9, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem with metered mirror-rhyme is unique. I've never read one like it before. Congratulations on winning GOLD (well-deserved).
You are now on my favorites list and I look forward to reading more words of wisdom from you written in your own inimitable way.
namaste
Maureen
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namaste
in return, maureen ...
thank you so much for your kind visit and wonderful words ... I feel blessed ...
marion
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Could u please put username
in you AN...please?
Thanks!
And thanks for entering!
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my username is ALREADY in my author's notes - maybe it wasn't clear enough :
Author notes
metered mirror-rhyme and
mirror-painting "wholehearted" by maa
maa
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beautifully written
this is absolutely beautiful...the words fit with the story told...awesomely written...beautifully done...thank you for sharing and commenting on my poetry...smile, David
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thank you so much for your kind visit and abundant applause, david ...
marion
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As Truth hangs in the balance, know that the image lies on both sides of the mirror, bringing the stillness tranquility.
Beauty words, sweet little sister.
BTW, there has been an early spring in my life... the return of the budding of a sweet flower...
Be ever bright little light,
Rod
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thank you so much for your most appreciated visit on these pages ... I am delighted to hear about your enchanting news ... eager to see this little flower-bud turn into a nectar-filled fruit ...
marion
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What I have learned is that living it and loving it is all part of the drive to keep the blanced weight swinging. I do not know, but I do believe....
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yes, faith is my only anchor here in this unstable world ...
thank you for your words of wisdom ...
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your rhyme is perfect and perfectly sublime, i rarely am as appreciative of rhyming poems on this site as i am compelled (and happily so) to be reading your rhyme. your spirituality soars, enveloping the reader in your light, your belief, you make your reader feel free, enjoying your words without being compelled to do so, both your poems shine in this special light some people are (enviably) blessed to feel and... exude.
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thank you so much for your generous applause and your kind words of appreciation ... to receive such a profound comment on a poem is a true blessing for me ...
maa
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living beauty
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thank you so much ...
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mastery
Dear lady, your words have filled a space in me today - surviving loss and blame, joy replaced with grief. Yet all is well, life is going on as it should. Once again I am amazed at the new meaning you demonstrate in mirroring your rhyme. Best wishes.
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thank you, dear margaret, for your little visit here ... I am sorry to hear about your experience of grief ... I send you an extra-big and warm hug and hope that your sorrow will pass soon ... I am here for you, should you wish to talk about it ...
take good care, my dear friend,
marion
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It Works!
I enjoyed this rendition of more than one form combined into a message that could carry one through not only the joys of life but also the trials and tribulations. Very nice read and it seemed to flow well, I only stumbled on one word, "surrendering" and had to go back and read again. The word actually was well chosen and as far as the message goes, "of major importance"! Good luck in the contest and you deserve to sit down with a nice "cuppa" and meditate. joy
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thank you so much, dear joy, not only for the abundant applause and warm comment, but also for having had the kindness to alert me about my lil error in the meter ... this means a lot to me ... I am truly grateful ...
all the best to you, rosy friend,
marion
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