Light dances through our aura;
illuminating the soul lying beneath,
like ocean tides dancing with distant shores,
share the light, dance with the tide, immerse your spirit
empty your vessel so it may be replenished daily
with fresh offerings of peace and serenity.
Share tranquility’s nourishment with laughter’s smile~
Author notes
"One should lie empty, open, choiceless as a beach -
waiting for a gift from the sea."
Anne Morrow Lindergh
I would love to be your AP sister and concider it my honor to be blessed by you each day.
In a list
A contest entry
- The Essentials by Heart Sutra.
525 points, ended February 17, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FAMILY FOR BLESSEDANGEL by JoyfulWriter.
450 points, ended February 12, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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thank you for entering the contest-
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I can see how and why this one placed in the other contest. It has a real aura to it.
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Thank you so very much for my bronze and congratulations to all of the winners. What a wonderful contest!
Becky -
Hmmmm......
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Interesting
Well, first off, the thing I loved about the poem is the imagery and, of course, the picture is awesome. This is obviously free verse, judging by its structure.
Yet, I do, none the less have some suggestions to make. While I enjoyed the great use of words, something I am sketchy on is the flow, or lack there of. I just didn't feel the poem had a lot of flow. Just as well, consider revising some of the puncuation. As in using periods, commas, semi collons, and collons to your advantage. Use them to help put more definity on your ideas. Just as well, use them to seperate your ideas so that it's not all one big run on sentence.
Of course, these are merely suggestions. Don't get me wrong, I do like most of your stylistic techniques and your ideas. Those make the poem unique as well as beautiful in it's own way.
Good luck in the contests.
Spill ink and stain the paper in poetry.
~Lady Oblivious
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This is nice. Our aura does show the essence of our soul, and the ocean tides rolling on to shore are a means of replenishing thoughts and feelings within the natural overall scheme of things.
I like the poem, and the picture fits into the overall theme.
Very nice.
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I really loved reading this from you! Such an amazing piece! What really grabbed me was "tranqulity's nourishment". Very profound to me. Thanks for entering my contest. Good Luck! Smiles, Terry
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I love the picture and I love the poem, some great images and strong word usage. This speaks highly of your talent.
Great penning, fantastic-
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beautiful serene piece...nice imagery,,,well done
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can we throw in a chicken leg too with that peace and serenity
ah no, off to exercise then. a good piece. good luck in the contest. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
lol at i do have a soft side, aye it is called my underbelly
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This is so tranquil; a great poem to read this morning when my mind starts rushing around as it does. Thank you.
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Beautiful write! Cool picture too. I lik your work, it always has such meaning. Keep up the great work here... please.
Bryan.
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A nice balance within this piece that reaches to both empty and replenish,yes it is a continuum,reaching for the light and both illuminating the self and others.A piece with sincerity and serenity,good luck in the contest,love and light,Yvette
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