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Lost Love




Once, I found a piece of paper
in a parking lot, bright white

fresh, as if just dropped there

by accident.


It was a note, addressed, “My Love”
and nothing more.


Either it was the shortest

love letter ever penned
or the author could only
transliterate what they felt.


I understand that
sometimes, love is not about
words, but more about
action


like impassioned eyes glancing

across a room
at the object of their affection


or, a touch so tender
that it electrifies all your senses,
becoming a part of you

melting into your soul.


I only hoped that whoever

wrote it would be able to experience

what I knew to be

beyond words.










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  • chilali
    November 14, 2008

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    Aww. Loved this one. Congrats on the HM Thanks for sharing


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    January 28, 2008

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    I can fully understand the way you wrote of impassioned looks and the electricity that flows from the gentlest touch. Your words really do wrap themselves around as I read them and stay within my mind. I can't imagine why there aren't more trophies on this page.

    Margaret

  • bluecollarlove
    September 7, 2007
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    Good write.I like the tender touch that makes you tremble with desire.


  • Cyprien
    September 7, 2007
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    This piece was devine. Very beautiful. Good luck in the contest!


  • Lillian Rose
    July 25, 2007

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    I really loved this write, the flow was wonderful and the words just seem to come at you. Every line keeps you hooked and wanting to continue reading more and more. The beginning was strong and so was the ending. I don't see how this is about a broken heart or a lost love poem though! Am I over looking something about this piece, I would like to understand. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you!


    Casey

  • Raven Judge
    July 22, 2007

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    This piece uses a poetic/literary device that is one of my favorite, that being the use of objects and scenarios to illustrate a point. Nothing works quite as well as good anaology and I think you have accomplished that here very well.

    My one concern about this peice is that it seems to be prose rather than poetry. You're telling a story, basically, and while you may use "poetic" devices within that telling there is a definative difference.

    If are interested in entering another work into the contest please email ravencontest@comcast.net for change/alteration approval code.

    Thank you for your entry, it is one of the more enjoyable non-premissable works I have read to date for the contest.

    ~Das


  • Elrenia
    June 5, 2007
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    I thought I had read this already, but it seems I was mistaken. Very touching. Sad, and yet hopeful at the same time. The sentiments hit home for me, as showing is more important than saying.

    Well wishes in the contest.
    Thank you for sharing.

    rous


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    June 4, 2007

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    beautifully stated

    such a letter to find if it could teach so much with so few words. thank you for entering this qualifier round and i wish you the best of luck. viyanna rosemarie

  • danigirl1940
    April 28, 2007
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    very good
    i agree love cannot always be expressed by words thanks for entering
    keep writting
    dani


  • Game Master
    April 8, 2007
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    I love it, that was wonderful!!! Great job, you might be a winner!!


  • WordWraith
    March 2, 2007
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    Hmm

    Interesting read. I loved the fact that it was so simple. It was very well written. I think that you did such a great job with this. I only wish that I was lucky enough to have thought this up. Holy garbage, you have me speechless. Well, done. Well done.


  • CherylAnn
    March 2, 2007

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    Awwww So Beautifully Written

    beautifully said I must say.the emotion was well entwined in the write.Love is about giving of yourself to someone else.
    My favorite lines:
    Like impassioned eyes
    Glancing across a room
    At the object of their affection
    Or, a touch so tender
    That it electrifies all your senses,

    such an awesome way to describe love.
    Good luck in your contest.
    God Bless

    ~Cheryl~


  • Matt Holck
    March 2, 2007
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    I like the detachment of the note in a parking lot


  • signum-io
    March 2, 2007

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    Very good. Aside from what the work has already given, I can see another meaning of love within this work.

    Love is not only about taking, but giving as well. Loving does not need recognition, but loving is in the importance of giving a part of oneself. It is giving to someone, regardless of who that someone is. Now, perhaps love would be like this letter left, or dropped by accident, which is to be alive in the hopes of being received.

    Thank you for sharing!

    - Nick (",


  • zimzam
    February 2, 2007

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    amazing

    great work pal, it was a simple story but yet beautifully poised and portrayed, you had me captured fora while, i myself am highly romantic and this did go well with me

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