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Girl in Toque

The surface of the pond slept white
In contoured lines of sheeted snow
Eyes drift in wakes of shallow shoals
And I wonder at the depths below

Mists part in breaths of rumpled time
To light a freckled face
Glints of silver-- blades in rhyme
Crowned by a woolen brow

Frost pompom beards sketched in white
--Hot snowflakes sear my skin
Strings fed by colors fat and bright
The lust of every crow
My buttoned collar scarfs my chin
And I wonder at the depths below
I wonder at the depths below

Author notes

Girls in toques rule! Must be a Canadian thing!
OK... just to elaborate a bit more...
I don't think wool knitted caps are known as toques (rhymes with spooks) anywhere else in the world. I see them where I live in a huge array of styles. I saw a girl in one yesterday that had little mouse ears and embroidered eyes and whiskers on the front... too cute!
You have to come to Canuckland for a visit, eh!
-Kj

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  • LionessK silver member
    July 17, 2008
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  • Naridill
    March 3, 2008

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    Below the cap



    [lol]


  • jasminerose
    February 4, 2007

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    Hi KJ
    well I see we all have are little things that float our boats and you have shared a very cute one indeed!
    Your poem is wonderful and the imagery is just perfect!
    Well done!! As this gave me a smile!
    Hope you are well!!
    Have a wonderful day!
    Linda


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    February 4, 2007

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    why do I have Bob & Doug McKenzie in my head now? Great to see a fellow Canucklehead here. A very enjoyable read, and yes, those toques can sure look good on the right head lol.
    Rory


  • angel-lover
    February 3, 2007

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    umm I think ya talkin bout (beanies) woolen caps..?
    great write.
    be well stay safe always from Tracey.


  • Jadestone Doll
    February 2, 2007
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    Wow, I didnt even know what a toque was until I read this. Learn something new everyday!


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    February 2, 2007

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    Have to admit i didn't know what a toque was,
    but i've got it now.

    your poem was excellent without flaw and full of imagery and metaphor.
    Your writings are of a form called brilliant!
    Slán agus gra.
    Dolores. x


  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 2, 2007
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    A canadian thing, huh? Well I would not know! Nicely done, smooth flow and very cute. Yet you will have to explain the Canadian thing to me, I can be a bit slow.
    Cute and enjoyable read as always. Good form and light hearted.

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