my home is a prison.
my school is the same.
no pleace do i have.
to close do they get.
i hate them all.
i wish they will go away.
to late to turn back.
to hate myself forever.
sometimes i wounder.
will i ever die.
or did i already and just live in hell.
i am an angel who has fallen.
cant dig my way out.
i hate myself.
and wish i could die sometimes.
i know that is not positable becuase noone will let me.
i try not to eat but i am forsted.
i would sleep all the time if i could.
i have no home.
i have no peace.
i have no life.
and i wish i wasen't me.
A contest entry
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why home is a prison
so so painful time?
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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I relate to poem alot. I feel as though i have created my own prison as well. I don't like being with people because..well i just don't. keep up the great work. Good luck in the contest.
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Yes, we create our own prisons, I can relate to your poem like every day of my life. I'm still like this, hiding from everyone and everything afraid to let people know me. But, let me tell you, you can break this prison and get on your feet. Get some faith and self confidence, they help. There will always be a better dy for us.
Cheers!!
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Well, you say that you live in hell, but i say unto you, that ignorence of the world is not bliss. You can see and understand the world around you, and you can see the bad.
Open your eyes. There are things in life that are worth living for.
Good luck.
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'or did i already and just live in hell.
i am an angel who has fallen.
cant dig my way out.
i hate myself'
We have all lived in hell...we can create our own prision's ...we can make what we have out of live! So break your chains and continue living, not in the dark & but in the light! ~Sie
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I can relate to this poem in so many ways. I have theese same emotions everyday . Like there is no place for me.
My favorite lines are theese :
i have no home.
i have no peace.
i have no life.
and i wish i wasen't me.
It is hard to get through your life issues and problems when you feel like you have nothing to help you or no one cares. That is one reason i try not to depend on many people. Really I only depend on me anymore evryone else just makes it worst at times. Thank you for sharing this. Very nicely written
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I can relate to this piece, and i know I have felt this way before, but have risen from my state to live again. I can feel the emotions radiating off of the screen. I can sort of feel pain, and anger, and I understand the point of view. Great job, and thanks for sharing. Take care XxX
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This is a very emotional write....your pain screams for someone to listen, awesome job. Please re-enter with an option #, so I can be clear which option you chose. Thanks for the entry.
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THIS POEM IS VERY INTENSE AND DEPRESSING. IT IS SO SAD AND I COULD FEEL YOUR DEEP PAIN AND EMOTIONS GROWING AS I READ IT. HOPE THIS WAS JUST A VERY BAD DAY FOR YOU AND TOMORROW BRINGS YOU SMILES
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Very sad and most compelling write. Make good of the good days, the bad will soon dissapear.
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wow. you did a great job relating your message. I know how you feel. Good luck and thanks for entering.
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wow this is how i feel daily....i really like it i dont know if it fits u in any way but everything u wrote is how i feel
great job i hope to read more like this
meg
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Hmm
Are you really feeling like this? There are good and not so good days. There will be better ones. I recommend that you just try to have a good time at whatever you do. Sorry if you are feeling down today.
Andy
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I can certainly relate to these feelings, they eat us up and kill us slowly. But you have to fight and keep going, because one day it will be better. I has to get better. Thanks for sharing.
As always I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Powerful emotions running through pen today....profound writing too....hope you are doing well....smiles, Terry
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bravo
very strong emotion expressed here in a very powerfull poem,
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that is a very depressing way to view life. I too have felt like I am a prisoner wherever I go, home, school, anywhere. I remember a time when I felt like I was on a leash, like I could only go so far, but could always be a prisoner. Anyways, taht is just me and my insane imagination. I liked this poem. It was derpessing, but I liked it.
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this is a emotional peace well written
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I could feel the emotion in this piece. This piece is wonderful. I think you have a natural talent for expressing the darkness within us all. I think mayhaps I should take thee under my wing and guide you, empower you to write more on the darkness that we all struggle with. This is the best of your works that I have read. Amazing write cousin, keep it up.
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thanks you lee for your wonderful comment this is how it usely is at home with mom and i put it in a poem
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u gotta stop all these suicide notes DIANNA....LIFE is what u make it...get some hobbies...go to movies more...karaoke or somethin...FIND YER SPIRIT...the SOUL sez IM HERE FOR U....
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i allready do to much as it is and life is not just what i make of it it also has to do with the people in my life exspesly the ones here in bradford and i am glad you are here for me dad and i will always be here to help you too when you need it love your daughtar serenity
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Wonderful Write
What a magnificent way to express yourself. I love how deep you go with this piece into your feelings and emotions. Great write and keep your pen forever flowing...........Michael
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Really dark and really sad- nicely written, however and full of feeling.....I reckon, just because you can write about stuff; you will be a survivor.
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Sad But Cool
You have now discovered the things that bring you down. That is good if you do this too: Tell me, your airway friend that cares about all your thoughs and feelings, the things that you do love about yourself and others around you. Think hard, take your time, look deep so you give an accurate discription of these things I ask from you. Your bestest buddy, Don
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there is really nothing i like about myself i am sorry to say that but it is true love your grandbaby cool breeze
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This is a most sad and disturbing poem,very dark and made me feel much sympathy and despair,i hope this really isnt how it is for you becasue for all the dark in the world it is always followed by light
great write !
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