YOU STUPID BASTARD YOU STUPID BITCH
ALL YOU ARE IS A FUCKEN' SNITCH
I HATE YOU BRAINS I HATE YOU GUTS
YOU STUPID BASTARD YOU RETARDED MUTT
DIE DIE ALL YOU CAN DO IS DIE
IT WONT MATTER I WONT CRY
ROLL IN THE DIRT FALL ON THE GROUND
IM GONNA BEAT YOU DOWN! DOWN! DOWN!
MIRROR MIRROR ON THE WALL
WHOS THE MURDERER OF THEM ALL
NOBODY WAS HARMED (YET) DURING THE MAKING OF THIS POEN
A contest entry
- Amaze Me! by Shantalina.
550 points, ended February 27, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Interpret Me by MeaningfulPoet482.
300 points, ended February 27, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fear by Passionate Singe.
600 points, ended April 7, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK OR ELSE
Comments
-
I don't really see where this actually ties into the contest. The "fear" is not reaching me. This is more like a rant at someone. In that aspect it is effect, like a scream in the face, but I think if you went a bit more subtle of the profanity and delved more into the emotion behind it it could be a wonderful piece.
-
I'm sorry about my last comment. This is a very nice write.
-
Um...nice but I don't remember putting this title in.
-
Wow
Vicious feelings in this one! Thanks fior entering!
Adding your comment:
