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lets play a game

lets play a game,
you count to a hundret,
I run to the woods.

lets sing a song,
and not make any noise,
lets go swim,
and Ill watch you drown.

lets lisen to our hearts..
but you dont have to hear.

lets play a game,
where you run,  
and I chase.

Ill carry a knive,
and stab you till you die,
all cause you opend those wounds.


Ill cry a little..
then start a new game,
where you haunt my dreams,
and I sit in darkness..

lets play a game,
where you break my heart,
and I end your live..

lets kiss again..
and watch as its your last.

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  • davidsangel113
    February 9, 2007
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    it's nice but a little scary... i totally understand where you coming from though... really good


  • LaLaLie
    February 4, 2007

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    This fits the theme perfectly. My favorite part was:
    "lets play a game,
    where you break my heart,
    and I end your live.."


  • eveningthought
    February 2, 2007

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    This is really very dark and really quite desolate and sad. it's got this whole creepy, disturbing fairytale-esque feeling to it. Baie goed!!!:-)


  • Baahltres
    February 1, 2007
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    oops forgot your applause

  • Baahltres
    February 1, 2007
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    Definitelly creepy. It's horrible and evil, truly, but then you realize that it's actually full of sorrow. You did a great job of making the transition from one to the other. You have spelling and grammar errors, by the way.

    Thank you for entering and good luck!!!


    ~.~Yvonne~.~
    Baahltres

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