How many pieces must one heart lose
Before it crumbles
Lying in pieces at my feet
Different sized chunks
For different size heartaches
How can it continue to beat
They can start falling
At any age, anywhere, any place
It starts as a crack in a pane of glass
Or as a chip in a porcelain dolls face
Paste or glue has no effect
No material thing to fix it with
The cracks grow larger with each heartache
A fine line growing larger every day
If I ever figure out how to fix it
I will gladly sell the secret for pay
A normal heart weighs six or seven pounds
I feel mine can be measured in ounces
There goes another, lying at my feet
Here comes more hurt
I feel it when my heart bounces
POETDONTKNOWIT><><><><><>
2/1/2007
Author notes
I wrote this in March 2006.
POETDONTKNOWIT
A broken heart never can remend itself.
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Sorry..I forgot three other buyers
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Wow...the point of vieuw we all know about...I guess it's true, a broken heart is hard to fix by itself...and with every scar its beat will slow down...I bet you will be rich if you ever find out the secret of reparing it...Because everybody will need it from time to time...
And to see at your contest entrees you are already working on a large group of buyers too
Good luck in my contest,
XXJeannette
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Thank you for the entry. Heartfelt and full of emotion
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this is intensely emotional. thanks for the entry.
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This is a beautiful, emotional write. I especially relate to the line, "How can it continue to beat" and it even reminded me of a short poem I wrote recently.
Good imagery:
They can start falling
At any age, anywhere, any place
It starts as a crack in a pane of glass
Thank you so much for your entry.
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This is wonderful. Best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Wow. This poem has a lot of emotion in it. I like the idea of the heart and after all it's heartbreak that it weighs ounces rather than pounds. Great message. Thanks for entering this into my contest.
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beautifully written. just wow...
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This poem is very well written my favorate lines are
Different sized chunks
For different size heartaches
How can it continue to beat
They can start falling
thank you so much for enteringmy contest and i wish you all the best. xXx -
awesome poem, i love it very emotive and you have great talent. only problem is, youre already on my favourites list. so you wont be able to win. but thank you for entering anyway. ill be holding another contest very soon, so please feel free to enter then. send me a msg anyway so we can have a chat. i wanna get to know everyone on my favourites list much love xxx
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sorry i have to DQ
my rules say rhyme and this dont rhyme
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This is a great write! i like the flow and the meaning behind it i think any girl or guy in that matter can realate to. its hard somtimes not being able to fix your heart. i think it can be fixed maybe sowed up but the scar will always be there just in memory but i think if you truly find someone who will sleal your heart without breaking it that person could fix a broken heart as well. great write though thanks for entering my contest.
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ohh wow
This is completely amazing.I love every word.The whole thing flows together perfectly.Good luck in the contest. :]
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Hope can sometimes glue all those pieces back together. I liked the flow, thought and meaning backing this great piece!!!
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i liked this. good luck! -Captain Obvious
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This poem has a very nice flow with it. I love it. I feel the depth of some of the stronger words you used, which flowed with the simplier ones. I like it alot.
Goodluck!! And thanks for entering!!
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So full of emotion and sadness. I could feel your pain. Good luck in my contest
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BRAVO....
beautiful ...
The heart can break in so many different little pieces...
Heidi -
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THANX
POETDONTKNOWIT
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I really love this
It is so ESPish but I was thinking of Tina Turner's
"Take another little piece of my heart" when I clicked
and this poem came up. Almost, scary here! So, much for that, I love this poem. Little pieces have been broken off my heart hundreds no millions of times. I think though what happens is after the outer shell is chipped away, this lies a thick, hard, cold, callus, protective shield the grows stronger and stronger each time it retaliates a heartbreak. There a problem, everyone does't have this shield, but their is sessions for straighting and building that shield, ask around,, I didn't have one but my sister trained me, but after she did she said she trained me too well, she created a monster. Let me stop wording around the bush and say what I came to say, YOUR POEM IS GREAT! I really enjoyed reading it and the message I could relate to. Thank you for this giving us this lovely piece of work!
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omg this was amazing loved the way you described it and if you ever find out i'll pay to have my fixed lol loved the write and the flow and the description
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Bravo!
No material thing to fix it with...
Oh so true! The things that people cannot see or feel, are truly the things that heal.
Very outstanding write, I really could feel the power of this write through my breathing...
Lo Amo, - Salute!
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Very emotional write. I think you have an incredible ability to write, please don't stop. I loved this. xxx
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This piece is filled with very strong feelings. I love where you said "It starts as a crack in a pane of glass / Or as a chip in a porcelain dolls face" - beautiful descriptions. The last line has something quirky about it - I like it.
DancingRed.
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if only u knew how much i relate to this. i commend u. its a grea poem, i like the reference to a porcelain doll's face
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this is awesome write on how much the hear can ache and how much it can take with each thing that life throws at it...great expression
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How much can an ache weigh in an organ that pulsates with life? Heaps and you have written it so well, can feel the stabbing pain and know how much I would too like to know of how to repair it. Only love dear poet, only love.
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Wow, my heart was nearly rended in two as I read this. Very emotional; I think I need to get a tissue now.
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very emotional write that allows me to feel the weight of the heartache thats carried. I really enjoyed this very much and thank you for sharing it
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Paste or glue has no effect
No material thing to fix it with
The cracks grow larger with each heartache
The most amazing expression with so much truth of love and life is depicted here so strongly and so beautifully and that is the strength of this wonderful write...Well this is life ,and in life the variety of incidents and variety of sentiments are imminent ..You have captured here much the originality of the story of the heart and the truth of this world relating to its need for each other..The beauty of this write lies in its depth and philosophy of life which has taken over the control over the muse of the poet and description of life here has forced to reveal this peculiar phenomena which is known as 'love' ..Indeed a great write is here... -
This poem kind of makes me hurt. Bad. I know how this feels all to well. If you go back through my poems, the very first piece I ever posted reminds me of this poem a lot. I like the way you put this, though. I like the imagery you used to convey it all. I also like the metaphors you used. It's aaawesome. Great job! Keep up the good work.
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Oh how sad
"I feel mine can be measured in ounces "
Wow, that is such a sad thought. You certainly painted a desolate picture with your words. I did enjoy the poem, it's just so very sad.
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