a fear, a mark on your brain.
an X carved into the cuts
With a pointy blade in your hands,
over something unseen
unknown, yet always has a pulse.
Will the day come when all I turn to
Is reckless engagement
In vengance of the time...?
I was raped from the inside...
Turned inside out, and used as a hammer
To nail down the parts falling off
Of the extreme lovers I had to always jump on to
Trip over, listen, watch and fall for?
...Will the day come when the smell aching up my nose
To see them suffer
To see her suffer for her arrogance
To see the bruises and pain flake around them
As they wallow in self pity
...is prominent and so sweet?
Will the day come when I let myself take hold
Of the blade directed at myself...
Point it outwards?
Will the day come when I blunt the knife.
Lose what it is....
That keeps me driving!?
Before any of that and all of this
Will The noises so awake and insomniac in my brain....
Lead me to the day come when I sit alone
A Damaged vase...
Crumbling peddals, weak stems...
Skeleton leaves,
No substance.
What's left of the cold water,
Molds and seeps through the cracks
that a dirty cat licks up...
I am none but the bitter taste on a tongue
The world will never consider
Author notes
I revised it
A contest entry
- 18 PROMPTS, pick ONE and write from your HEART, I dare you. by SeptemberFaith.
1050 points, ended March 25, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Surrealism Contest for Beautiful Minds by reeseXtheXsoldier.
475 points, ended September 6, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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"Turned inside out, and used as a hammer
To nail down the parts falling off
Of the extreme lovers I had to always jump on to
Trip over, listen, watch and fall for?"
"A Damaged vase...
Crumbling peddals, weak stems...
Skeleton leaves,
No substance.
What's left of the cold water,
Molds and seeps through the cracks
that a dirty cat licks up..."
Those are both really good... This is pretty good.. not quite sure it's what I'm looking for though.
T.F.R.B.
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please submit this wonderful piece here: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2418529
Thanks! You rock!
The Famous Reese Bailey
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I'm not sure what option you choose here and I didnt really understand what you were trying to get across. Good luck in the contest poet.
Criss -
PLEASE MAKE SURE YOU PUT THE PROMT (THE ENTIRE THING) IN YOUR AUTHORS COMMENTS SO I CAN KNOW WHICH ONE WAS YOUR CHOICE. IF YOU DONT, YOUR POEM WILL NOT BE CONSIDERED.
This was the one and only rule. I have read your poem and deeply enjoyed it but unless you revise your authors comments, you will not be considered.
Good luck poet.
Criss
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