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Abundantly Consumed

 

 

 

 

 

Mother earth, where is your beauty?

 

Not just in the shoulders, or the arms,

not even in the belly, nor the womb;

albiet the place of sanctification,

of a future life.

 

See the opulent reflection set in stone,

not one look falters, the gaze is steady,

liquid light surrounds you...abundantly,

drapes your presence in solid tones,

banded as it is by earth's colour.

 

Fingers are drawn magnetically toward you,

eager to caress the contours of your smooth lines,

strata upon strata, fold within fold,

a oneness emanates from within,

is caught by the beholder and... consumed.

 

 

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I have written this free verse, it was the best way for me personally to express the words that came to me as I studied the picture.

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  • Tseng Yu Nung
    April 15, 2007
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    tranquil

    I like how you chose to write this poem in free verse, nothing is forced - it all just flows naturally (how ironic, since you're writing about mother nature). The poem gives off a soft aura of beauty through "opulent reflection," "liquid light," and "caress the contours of your smooth lines."


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    April 9, 2007

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    This is lovely..
    "strata upon strata, fold within fold,
    a oneness emanates from within,"

    A quite beauty in what you have penned..



  • April 8, 2007
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    wonderful

    I love your style. As youy said to me, everyone has their own and yours works. KUDOS


  • Agp
    February 9, 2007

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    Kudos

    "strata upon strata, fold within fold,

    a oneness emanates from within"

    I love your word choice, and the flow pulled me all the way through, so graceful.


  • wishintreeUK
    February 3, 2007
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    Thank you shenativewolf for the Silver. This was one of those contests that comes up once in a while that really did reach out to me, The figurine was truly beautiful. Thank you for hosting this particular contest, giving us the opportunity to express our view of the figurine.

    Congratulations to Gold and Bronze, also to everyone who entered, there were some excellent pieces of work.

    ~Katie~


  • Blue Rew silver member
    February 2, 2007

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    The has all the elements to lend the reader an actual sense of touching the stone. I really love the qualities embodied & the way they embrace the reader.
    Blue


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 2, 2007

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    Oh, yes, indeed, I would not be able to keep my hands off her. My fingers would want to trace her holiness.
    Beautifully done.....


  • TallDrinkofWater
    February 2, 2007

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    Wonderful

    Very Vivid and colorful also very peaceful in a way, The words are simpley wonderful, Write on Poet


  • troyias silver member
    February 1, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is an amazingly wonderful poem that has such a wonderful feel about it just like the form in the picute. Absolutely wonderful.


    *Go with God*
    Valerie

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