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Denied

 



black and white and faded,

are the memories lost

in a sea of misplaced dreams

 

shoulda ~ coulda ~ woulda~

 

questions left unanswered

by chances not taken

and roads not traveled

 

Fear left unconquered

with haunting what ifs;

a leap of faith denied


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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 29, 2008

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    Superb piece. You know I do love this font, but it makes it a little hard to read for me. Maybe I'm just getting old.


  • Tangled Angle
    February 4, 2007

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    Yes! I loved this. Perfect. I loved how you used the colors.. Very clever. Openning lines, you got my attention.


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    February 2, 2007

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    A leap of faith denied - this is such a strong line, it actually rounds off this poem with impact.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • Bryan K Johnson
    February 2, 2007

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    Beautiful write. The last line is great, because we never think of a leap of faith not turning out. It seems its almost required for them to work out, so this was a nice peice of reality. Thanks for entering.

    Bryan.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    So beautiful, sweet sister mine yet so very sad! I hope all is well with you, sweetie! This is a very touching piece and I wish you all the best in the contest!


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    February 1, 2007

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    This piece is so sad mum . Ah those questions we often ask ourselves about past and even present situations. But things happen for a reason and this path we are led down whether right or wrong is supposed to be that way. You shouldn't regret anything either, what's done is done. There's is always a reason why things happen and not being lead down that path may have benefitted you more than you'll ever know , no regrets . Beautiful write mummy.
    Love you loads,
    Lil


  • Candy Holic Ferret
    February 1, 2007

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    Ahh so pretty yet sad. Black and white and faded sounded strange, but yet it fit it. Maybe it was and being used twice.

    Beautiful write, Oma,
    Much love,
    Nikki


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    Enchanting and true

    Hi Bel

    I loved reading this one; the opening stanza immediately drew me in! The subject matter you have worked with is something much to my liking, though I feel the piece has potential for greater longitude.

    "What ifs, buts and maybes, if onlys" ... they are like ghosts, reaching out from a world of missed opportunities to haunt us over time, sometimes even leading to feelings of regret. In terms of the roads and chances that were neglected or declined, so often this can be caused by not following one's own heart, I believe. There are the given roads laid down stone by stone by the government, society and all such; then there are the interesting little winding lanes that spiral off in all directions, into the mists of the unknown. Even though all roads loop and intertwine to lead us to the inevitable destination (death), each person has an opportunity to undergo their own unique journey through life, and as they say, "no two people are the same"; hence no two journeys can be either lol!!

    Only one minor thing you might wish to consider:

    "black and white and faded"; consider substituting the first "and" for a comma, ie "black, white and faded"; alternatively you could use "black and white; faded". This might make it a little sharper. Only a minor suggestion though.

    Glad I passed your way today for an enchanting read

    Stu


  • Abdul T Alishtari
    February 1, 2007

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    My sister this is beautifully sad...

    Our memories hurt yet
    they overflow from mind
    with feelings of regret
    making us emotionally blind.

    Yours and mine together
    would make others insane
    and like inclement weather
    any avoidance is inane.

    Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 1, 2007

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    hmmmm interesting few lines My lioness this could be about mostanything I havve a guess or two *shrugs* well done and good luck in the contest

    Love,
    Master


  • Olivias Violin
    February 1, 2007
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    Very Good

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