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Nothing

All I hear is nothing
My heart is breaking on nothing
Im crying because that hurts
To see you suffer
And I stare into this nothing
Wasting endless time
As I try to hold this all inside

Im looking down on this world just wishing
I’m wishing to find that something missing
I feel that no longer does this world make sense
And it seems I have found
The silence that becomes so loud
Screaming out the pain which I feel
The feeling which is nothing

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and it seems that i have found...nothing at all..it seems thats sometimes being confused lets our hearts be recognised for its true self

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  • aligurl
    November 21, 2007

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    An amazing piece. However, I think it would be better if you didn't keep repeating the word "nothing". If you used other words that are synonyms It would definately add more effect. good job.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    I feel just the opposite

    So often the mind does play tricks on us and causing us to feel thats all their is yet their are so many parts to the mind and to find the part that gives joy sometimes we have to ignore the side that brings sorrow and refresh our feelings and know life is good for we ourselves choose how we think therefore are able to say no to anything else . The heart keeps time no matter what unless you let the mind control you and all aspects of life .To so so its not the heart to blame its the reasoning that has been pushed aside for
    sorrows taken the lead. Its what I got from the write


  • UnchartedPoet
    November 21, 2007

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    I believe we all have been here once in our lives, in a state of nothingness we end up finding something when we are not looking for it. Thanks for sharing your work.

    Jen


  • cc
    November 21, 2007

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    i really get the feeling you are expressing in this.i have been on the edge of seeing ,hearing and finding nothingness also and this peice touches that emotion.its very good writting


  • Falon
    February 7, 2007

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    WOW....!! this is so freakin awsome!!
    im serious i really loved it the whole thing from the first line right till the last. great structure and execution, rhyming is smooth and has a nice flow! And the subject is so real, I can realate to that feeling of nothing is just there.
    keep up the great work sweetie love ya
    Falon xoxo

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