I've lost my personality,
it drained off in my poetry,
so it looks as if I've found
a reason to let go of me.
I found my abnormality
it shines through my poetry.
They might think I'm a freak,
well... you know, hopefully.
I've argued with insanity
but I don't know it's me.
I am on a winning streak,
I've lost so many things.
A member of humanity
society seems so bleak,
I'd rather have the ability
to fly away on wings.
High above the canopy,
with a view of everything,
a mountain on the horizon,
trees so very green,
the water's clear
so dive into this fantasy,
it feels like we're flying...
but I'm just riding poetry.
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Breezy
Like a good dream. Very enjoyable.
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Your a good poet
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Excellent piece.. its a very fine line between sanity and insanity, and poetry I guess gives us the chance to explore the darker recesses of the mind..
flow is smooth, and know I have been here...
Cheers
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I really like the simplicity and openness of this. Something about the rhythm and structure is also really attention-grabbing and kept me wrapped up in this till the end. Cool poem!
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I think i've read this before but no matter. it's great. and i would give anything to have wings.
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Yes it does..
I love these verses:
I am on a winning streak,
I've lost so many things
As we discussed, you have a lot of talent. You speak rhyme very well and it comes across in your work.
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I love this piece and the fact you have made it sound like a child reading a story about the world of poetry and what fun you can have in the imagination and to lose yourself in it. Very great write
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great job with this piece....love the ending, it captures the essence of writing extremely well. Great rhyme and flow throughout. A very enjoyable read.
Rory
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I think there are times in all our lives that we would like to just fly away. I like this poem very much.
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great poetry!
you really seem to have control of your pen. writing in rhyme isn't always as easy as we might believe. You make it look easy. I love how you bring a freshness to your writing. thanks for sharing. peace always in all ways!
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Awesome
I really love the part that clashing winning with losing. This is great. Nothing is "just" poetry. ;] Poetry is POETRY! lol.
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Great!!
Yes, at times many ofus feel the same. To fly above all the mess and junk here and view it from on high. wonderful.
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"so dive into this fantasy,
it feels like we're flying...
but I'm just writing poetry."
That part was really good. wonderful actually.
Love it
-Dani
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'I've argued with insanity
but I don't know it's me.
I am on a winning streak,
I've lost so many things.'
I think this stanza really helps detail out the insanity and lost feeling of which you speak. I like this...a personal message...but I'm almost positive thousands of people can relate exactly. You made it your own even though you feel you've lost your presonal flare. Great write.
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great
This is awesome I love the way you experss yourself losing the opinion of what others speak and become one with your soul and nature. Poetry really allwos us to explore ourselves like we might not otherwise great job with this my new friend.
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Deep...
That's really deep it, clearly, comes from a very vivid imagination. You have a talent for writing, and I encourage you to use it.
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You can fly, crawl, imagine all the stars and moons in the universe and all because you can write it straight from your imagination, surreal really and a wonderful gift.
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High above the canopy,
with a view of everything,
a mountain on the horizon,
trees so very green,
the water's clear
so dive into this fantasy,
it feels like we're flying...
but I'm just writing poetry
very pretty piece... who cares what they think? it's your uniqueness that makes you who you are and that shows in your work... well done
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