Hackles rise
Moonlight glints in hollow eyes
Biding
Nostrils flare
Heavy breaths snap through the air
Yearning
Padded paws
Adorned with arching saber claws
Shifting
Slavered fangs
Freed of wretched human chains
Flashing
Tempting sight
Unwitting, steps into the night
Taunting
Mighty strides
Eat the sand like rising tides
Striking
Piercing cry
Leaps to meet the ebon sky
Riving
Yielding meat
Tears in slender dripping sheets
Feasting
Author notes
Username: Ontarah
Second poem: option A-Mythological creature: werewolf
I'm not normally one to write poems about werewolves or vampires just for the heck of it, but I thought I'd give it a try. It turned out to be an interesting deviation.
I have no idea what this form is. It's something I made up on the spot. It's meant to be sort of simplified and fast paced as a werewolf might actually think on the hunt.
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- Fantasy Options by BittersweetPhantasm.
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This is relly effective, and I love the structure. I don't normally like dark stuff - especially not werewolves as wolves are my favourite animal and so it scares me a bit - but this is brilliant! One thing I would say, is that you could change the 'slavered fangs' to 'slav'ring fangs', because slavered sounds a little odd.
Great flow - I'll have to try somethig like this soon!
Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
very nice, he he. I don't usually like rhyme, but i liked the construction of this piece and it flows very well.
congrts!
rachel
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This is a beautiful work of poetry. The rythm and scheme is very inviting and lovely.
Flows so well, and sends a distinct message.Most creative and thought provoking.... another beautiful piece my friend! Be blessed and thanks for sharing your incredible talent!
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wow
this seems a bit too significant to be simply a fantasy poem... does it have underlying themes of the emancipation of creatures that cannot reason perhaps? that the man who becomes a wolf is happier as a wolf as he no longer has to think?
i really enjoyed reading this poem, it has a really good rhythm and the words fit together like a jigsaw... it really is very good
comment me?
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I thought this poem was good!!!
I thought this poem was really good for imagination, usually I wouldn't even bother with poetry like this but with this one I'll make an exception. Anyways that was besides the point I really thought this poem to be interesting.
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wow - i like this. it's very simply put and the entire thing of the one word separation of the stanzas works really well.
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Really great write. I like the way you have described the werewolf while he was hunting. I thought you did a really fine job with this. Well done.
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cool
I love the whole werewolf thing. This is really cool. Simple, yet I thought it gave so much more than the sum of it's parts. different style, for me anyway. Like it! Thanks!
Jason
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