Tears flow from her eyes
and blood drips from his wrist
she is trying to show him
but he is working so hard to resist
Tears slide off her ashen cheeks
She imagines them washing her free of the pain
Hating herself to distract, but it hurts so much less
Hiding her face as if that will rid her of the shame
Pretending that denial will conceal the misery she has
That she isn't really dying on the inside
Tears of Crimson fall from his wrists
The scars will represent this feeling and stain
He hurts himself, but it doesn't mask his anguish
Wiping the blood as it drops and he knows it's in vane
Ripping himself to pieces as if that will stop it all
As if shredding his flesh will make everything better
Love radiates from her just for him
The shattered pieces are a memoir of her heart
To divert her attention, she abstains from eating
She hopes that it will be what tears her apart
Not willing to show what is really tormenting her mind
Why she wakes up every single night in tears
Realization of her feelings flows through his veins
The dripping of his blood freely will show how he doesn't care
Secretly wishing that it were true, he watches his skin go pale
Of every second ticking off slowly he is losing time and aware
Never will he disclose what makes him do this
Why the bathroom tub is stained red and he gets up everynight alone
Her tears will never stop
until his blood runs dry
her eyes will continue to burn
if he just lets himself die
Author notes
option #1
A contest entry
- Dark, Love, Fantasy? by --Beautiful--.
550 points, ended February 18, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Mmm.. a very good piece of writing but unfortuanately you decided not to read my rules.. thank you for entering but next time please read the rules of the contest.
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wow
so much pain it makes me cry...you did a good job with all of the emotion...this is the best thing I've read today...great job...keep it up...
your friend,
Ace ♠
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damn. that is something extrauber...lots of detail...i just think that Tears of Crimson is used to much...or like crimson...idk it may just be me..but anyways...the poem, it is indeed beyond good.
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Two parts....it challanged my iimagionation..in a good way, i loved the imagrey
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I thought this was presented with so much imagination. I don't write dark poetry but I do admire those that do.
This was wonderfully done. Great job
Soulful Woman
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Good luck in the contest! -
OMG
this is nothing i exoected when I clicked....its wonderfully bloody and romantic! I LOVE IT! Great write. I love how you parted the different versions of the two thoughts from the two people so apart, it added to the effect...made me feel the lovers were far apart. This is a very sad poem, but powerfully written!
S~A~E
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this is good but strange...i don't know why you put all the space inbetween yoru lines it makes it weird to read...but good job any ways...thanks for entering and good luck!
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that poem was really sad but really good. I loved your choice of words. I felt like i was there watching it. You did wonderfully! after reading this poem you made me think about i wonder what happend next. well done! i also see your in a contest soo well good luck and hope you win its a powerful peace for sure.
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Thanks
Even if I don't place in the contest I am very content with my piece. It is definately one of my best.
~Snowfall
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I really loved what you have thrown into this one!!! Overall, this si a very powerful and energizing piece to stimulate the reader and the writer in all of us, and that is what makes this so mujch just that... a very powerful thing that you need to say that everyone can be sure to enjoy!!!!
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you are telling a story here. but it is not the one you see. its the one you want us to see.
great poem. a reader
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Thank you for commenting... I am glad to hear that you enjoyed my poem so much.
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i actually loved this peice it gets the point across clear. i like the style and the heart you put forth here. i dont know bout you or everyone else but i give this 3 applauses! if you would keep me posted on your new poems!
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Thanks for commenting and I am glad that you liked it. I changed it up a little from how it used to be, but the meaning and most of it is the same. You have read the newer version of it, which I think was better than the older. I will keep you posted on any new poems I write that are similiar to this. Thanks again.
~Snowfall
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this poem goes deep and is written with talent...keep up the good work
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So very sad...
I kind of like what you did with this...
I hate what it's about.
It makes me sad....
Beautifully written though...
xoxo
Sahaba
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wow, i really like the thought and emotional depth you've put forward here. keep it up.
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Amazing write
This is beautiful in it'as sadness. The pain and confususion seems so real and empty. This is an unsual style yet it is an astounding write.
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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Her tears will never stop until
His blood runs dry
She can't do anything but
He can still try
Well one thing I must admit that the content of this work is really very touchy and very true to its meaning relating to the life here...regarding the style of presentation ...truely it is different but I am not feeling like answering whether it has enhanced the strength of this work or not but indeed it is very impressive heart as it has a heart in every word of this poem..
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