You and I,
We are not so different.
The same feelings,
The same smile,
The same love.
You and I.
We are too different.
My fair skin; Nothing like yours.
Your light hair; Nothing like mine.
I am bawdy, but meek.
You are soft, but strong.
We are sisters.
We are the same.
With slight differences.
Author notes
This is for the Bronze.
Tell me about the flow, the wording, any improvements that need to be made.
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I like this very much every thing flowed so nice
I was impressed with two Sisters so different yet so much alike.
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Good flow! I think in the first line though, it should be you and I. As in the sixth also. But that's just my opinion. Otherwise it's awesome in the way it compares sisters
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great write and very true
good job
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Very well penned and very true how 2 people can be so slike but at the same time so opposite you put it very well best of luck to you in the contest
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this poem is really great, i love how you say you are the same, and then contradict yourself, then contrdict yourself again. a very powerful poem, congrats on a great write, and good luck in the contest
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Thanks ^_^
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wow this is very good i like it a lot. i have a sister and we have nothing in common execpt that we came from the same family. i am glad that you wriot this poem. dont ever stop writing, becaus from this poem you seem like a wounderful poet.
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Thanks ^_^
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no problem.
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this is great i really love this carly you you should wirte more
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Thanks ^^;
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This is good... everything looks good to me stylewise, spelling wise and grammar wise, so you've passed my test, lol... anyways, nicely written, a nice change from the darker poems i've read tonight. Z~
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