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False Foundation

 




Twin towers ~

      mirrored reflections

             speak

                 in daily days passing.

 

Steel structure

              under pressure

                         squeals

                                &

                                 wobbles.

 

Weight limit

           exceeded ~

                 concrete ballast

                   cracks

                       &

                        crumbles.

 

Architectural implosion

                blueprints faltered ~

                             ceilings collide

                                             with floors.

 

Stone columns

                   fall to ruin;

          impaled ~

upon substandard foundation.


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  • requiempoet gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    This is a great poem, I like how you used the twin towers...and it could be used sort of both ways, a relationship and the actual buildings.
    I'm a scorned woman right now...so relationships...stink. ha ha

    Rosita


  • Tangled Angle
    February 4, 2007
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  • Annalise
    February 1, 2007

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    I like this. It's original. I like the change in font size. It works very well with the subject, I think.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    February 1, 2007

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    This is a very interesting piece, so true are the words written here. Depicting unstable relationships. well written mummy,
    Love you


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 1, 2007

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    thjis is a solid write and yes without the foundation all types of relationships crumble to the ground for the base is always left when the diasters come and go and what is tthere what is left determines its fate good or bad well done My lioiness

    love,
    Master


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 31, 2007

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    Awesome write, Bel! As always, your wording and presentation are just a beautiful combination! Wish you all the best in this contest!


  • B Chandler
    January 31, 2007

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    You're finally showing that part of you that is abstract whilte still keeping in tune to your own vocalled intepretations. Keep penning

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