Wonders bent across the sphere of night
As eeriness sung lies of enduring hope
Her soul collected the time of dew
As her flesh chased the winds of grief
Its silent sways, its lovely touch
Lost groans fell within distant eyes
Into the horizon was her desired home
Into the sweet hair of tranquil peace
Willow tress told lies of long ago myths
Of how love will follow the soul of a girl
Into those myths it blessed her mind
These myths had cursed her bared love
Her true love never found her soul
Shadows dreamt of its foreign mate
How bleakness fell within subtleness
As escaped was the truth of answered lies
Grown was her soul
Her soul never slept
For love again...
Myths that took her into their subtle dreams!!!
In a list
A contest entry
- Have you forgot to forget? by ForNever.x.
550 points, ended March 5, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS(enter anything you like)PW allowed by ExpectingMommy18.
900 points, ended October 16, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Poetry Options by RX-Queen.
375 points, ended February 19, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DARK writes PW by InMyFlames.
380 points, ended February 18, 2008, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very powerful imagery, and the piece is crafted beautifully. Though the idea is not unusual, the writing style is unique here. I do think that the exclamation points at the end should be taken out; they create a sort of non-formality and lack of seriousness that stay with the reader, as they are at the end of the poem. Again, really lovely piece, thank you for entering. I'm adding you to the finalists' list.
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Excellent!!
Well written and beautifully versed!
congratulations on the bronze!
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"Grown was her soul
Her soul never slept
For love again..." i love those couple of lines well done and thanks for entering
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this was a great poem and you did a wonderful job of writing it.
please put which option you chose though for i dont want to have to DQ you.
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!! -
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ohh I already did but not in the notes because i didn't want my font to change. Before you commented I already put option 2 right below
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OPTION 2
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OOPS! forget to add these
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OUCH!!!! but oh so well done . . . I was drawn to your line lengths and to how much you filled those lines with pure poetry.
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WWWWWWWwwwwoooooowwwwwwww!
if you knew how you just described a personal situation to the tee, you would be amazed. the trophy is well deserved. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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Thanks for entering my contest.
WOW!
Great use of language...and imagery!
Nice flow, too.
I personally like to see puncuation though.
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excellent write
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nice.....damn thatshurtful...but still it attracts the reader
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Oh, thought Provoking my little dear. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. Wish you the best of luck
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