I remember telling her to breathe.
An agonising groan is her reply.
Breathe that’s all you have to do.
Easier said than done.
Me, the person by her side,
nine months of waiting, anticipating.
Breathe, focus on your breathing.
The grip on my hand tightens,
the sweat on her brow glistens,
her face contorts in pain.
Breathe, slow and steady,
breathe the pain away.
My mind drifts, will it be boy or girl?
A groan, muffled through clenched teeth
brings me back to reality.
Breathe is all I can say.
Caught up in the moment,
in the pain.
Just breathe, focus,
just breathe.
Emotions erupt,
pain is forgotten,
exhilaration grips us.
A life is created,
something tangible,
someone to delight our lives.
Time stretches, washed in perspiration,
exhaustion sweeps over emotions.
Too tired to do anything, other than smile.
Too tired to do anything, other than breathe.
Breathe. that’s all I have to do, all I want to do.
Breath, after breath, after breath.
In a list
A contest entry
- January New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended February 15, 2007, 120 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be honest, whilst stroking my ego is nice it does not help me grow as a writer. If you have any constructive criticism or positive suggestions on how to improve my work please let me know.
Comments
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Excellent
Congratulations G.C.! Your poem was outstanding, and packed with emotion and the joy and wonder of new life. The judges got it right. Your's was definitely the better poem. Nice work!
David Weese
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I really enjoyed this, what a beautiful family. Did you share this with your wife?
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A warm welcome to All Poetry!
Wow this was really well written...I wouldnt think that a man could experience this much during the birthing process
Thank you for entering the contest
I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry!
abscessed
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Thanks for your entry
It is nice to see the joys of birth from the male perspective. It is a refreshing take on the circumstance. Definately a wonderful read.
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Thanks for your comments and warm welcome.
Gary
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Thanks for entering
I have had two children and I must admit that I have never once considered what the father was going through at the time. Guess I was to preoccupied
The poem has a fluid flow, like each breath taken in and then exhaled. By the way, was it a boy or a girl?
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
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Breathe
Thanks for your comment. We actually feel quite useless and overwhelmed by it all and at the same time euphoric and filled with deep compassion for what our partner is going through. Breathe is all we can do to stay focused. Wouldn't miss it for the world. We have 3 beautiful boys and a gorgeous girl.
Gary
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Lol...Try passing a bowling ball and breathing at the same time
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Seriously though, you've written an emotive piece here on one of life's miracles. How does the body (that we take so much for granted ~ and often abuse!) know how to do all that it does, especially when it comes to creating life and giving birth to it? Quite awesome when we ponder it.
Best of luck in the contest, new member!
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I dropped a bowling ball on my foot once, is that the same?
Life truly is amazing, its a pity most people take it for granted.
Gary
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Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
This poem sure brings back a lot of memories my way. This is something most all women have in common and all fathers. The miracle still amazes me. Nicely done Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to Allpoetry
Dove
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Thanks for the kind words and for wishing me luck, I've only been a member for 3 days and already feel part of the family.
Gary
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Awww
This is great.
I love it!
Great write!!!
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Thanks for your response. it's always great to have others appreciate what you do.
Gary
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Thanks for entering
You do kinda feel helpless when your wife is having a baby. All you can say is breathe. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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