Please don’t make it any harder than it already is for me to leave
Don’t cry the tears that are mine
I’m going through changes I cannot accept
And I can’t have you here with me
I’m confused in thoughts I cannot explain
I feel fate taking over
My life is turning in a different direction
The dream that I’m going to live from now separates our pathways
I don’t want to love you knowing ill bring you pain
I want you to live to love to remember
And so I’m taking the wise way out
It will break both our hearts
It will bring pain
But time is the best healer
And soon the memory will fade
To leave in the deepest of our hearts a love that was once so strong
Author notes
What i love about this poem is i wrote it as the thoughts entered my head, therefore making the poem very deep, coming from the heart and with an easy flow.
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i like it!
beatiful imagery, and the meaning is great! very well done indeed! However, it would sound better if you split the first line after 'already is' and put it on a new line. And in line 10, "..to live, to love...remember" i think sounds beter without the 'to' before the 'remember'. And finaly "but time is the best healer" isn't very effective, maybe something like "But time is known for healing best" would be better? i'm sorry for being such a critic
i still like the poem a lot!:
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Welcome to Allpoetry!
This is certainly a very heart-felt poem. Your poem is wonderfully felt and understood. Albeit sad- it is also beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you so much for sharing your words with all of us here. I would like to take this opportunity to welcome you to the site. I know being new to a site you may have a few questions or concerns, so please feel free to ask any greeter or use the "Help" tab at the top of your page
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you cannot not enter this. why? well i'll tell you because the rules say to choose a title from my list on my page and you have not done that. please fix this or you will be DQed. last warning.
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listen dani im nu to this site therefore im bound to make some mistakes im soryr if entered the poem or contest incorrectly, im not really sure by wat u mean about choosing a title, so if you have the time pls explain it to me, however if u dont just forget it and dont enter my poem
thanks sveta
ps wat is dqed?
wb
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