The Raven hid within the mist;
to chant a tune of doom.
The dusk is dying and the rest -
of day shall see no moon.
That silver night of shadow hues,
more takes my sight afar.
Than day's apparent fading muse;
that scorns the subtle star.
The Raven hid within the mist,
and gestured darkly still.
Such mystery provokes me best;
and lets my inkings spill.
Please tell me what you think
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really neat
I loved the flow of the poem!!!
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great job!
love the rhyming scheme, love the darkness, love the adjectives, love the "the's" and "of's" and "and's" and "at's" that keep this poem smoothly together like the thousands of threads of a silk quilt! marvelous! -
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Lol
Thank you deeply, you do flatter me.
Be well,
RD.
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I like it!
wynd-fyre
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Thank you
RD.
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A nice description of your muse
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Thanks
Pleasure to see your kind comments again mister Jim.
Be well,
RD.
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woot woot
I like it. especially the final line: "and lets my inkings spill." awesome,man, awesome.
fantasy it is, and i give you a superior two thumbs up. (roger and ebert)
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Lol
Thanks then for both of them.
"Tune of doom" brings in some reminicing I persume eh !!
Be well.
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This is beautiful. The imagery is great, and the rhyme is wonderful. I especially love the last stanza, it ties it off well it and gives it more mystery. good luck-Bethany
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Thank you so much
It has been a joy to enter your contest,
RD.
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Great style.
Love this style and your rhyme and rhythm are perfect. A wonderful write and I hope a winner in the contest.
Jim
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Lol
Hopefuly,
but it's the experience that counts eh !
Be well dear mster Jim,
RD.
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Raven, Raven in the dark,
Casting eyes without and in,
Rending, clawing in the mist,
Unwary ones cannot resist,
No sweetness, in his inky kiss,
No fire to light his dark abyss,
Glossy black in mystery,
Careful, careful, he may see-
A twin has found its mark!
For you, 100 applauses if they could fit in this small space. Perfect title, certainly caught my eye. This piece is 'inky' and truly 'Raven-ous'.
As always, a fan. Rhonda
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I am speechless
and am in gratitude, must say that this little Raven-poem of you had me over-thrilled with grace.
I can only say that your applause works its magnifecence even if it's subtle, it's nontheless powerful and deep to my heart.
Thank you more and more,
RD.
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