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All The While

I know that it's //not//that//easy// to be [yourself] right -now-, and I know that you're [[.TRYING]] to please me, but I \\can't\\ really see -how-.
I don't want /r/a/z/o\r/ wrists or second-hand love t~wists&&, I just want to see your ^smile-, and I know that you're [[.TRYING]] to please me, but you pleased me all.the.while.

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Something that just came out. Not directed to anyone in particular, I just write these things. I'll probably write something else on top of it, but right now... I guess this is it. Enjoy.

Noise&&Kisses

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  • sweetpearl
    February 1, 2007

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    This is written wonderfully. The rhyme worked out really well. The first part, however, "I know that's it" would probably sound better with "that it's" for me anyway. I just really like the way this looks and rhymes. A good short write


    • ohemeegeeay
      February 1, 2007
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      Oh crap, that's what it was meant to say.. damn brain! Thankyarrz lotsly for the comment.

      Loveyarr.
      Noise&&Kisses