Step into the gloom of nightmares
Listen for the muffled screams
The obdurate man ambles along
Obliterating the child's dreams
Behold the meridian of such events
Innocent souls are shattered
Bringing forth the demon of terror
Robes blacker than night and tattered
A child's fear it shall feed upon
Now hearken the chains raucous clatter
Until peaceful dreams are gone
Author notes
everything I had is gone
A contest entry
- Dark Pic Inspired by Tattboyspet.
800 points, ended October 11, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Unfortunately you did not attach the link or the pic to this write, ergo I'm not certain which pic it pertains to, but thank you for the entry
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this screams child molestation/abuse to me..maybe im just reading to deep...heartfelt...and sad....we all fear something as a child...to bad it didn't win anything...
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this is so amazing...wow...i really don't know what else to say except WOW. absoulty amazing...thankyou so very much for entering my contest and best of luck!!!
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Children fear the monster and have nightmares about him, he may be hiding somewhere in the house, in the wall or in the ground outside, usually they don't see his face, if he even has a face (maybe that comes later) not even an obdurate man, but a terrifying Thing...
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Ohhh nice really dark and so well done. Thanks for entering Good Luck!!!!
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ohoh. This was so dark...and amazing!
Makes me feel scared to go to sleep. 
Kidding. But amazing job! Keep up the great work!
Tori
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Very good...short creepy and sweet...i like this alot! thank you for reading my rules and entering my contest...good luck!
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heya lovely poem, all I'd say is add some punctuation for example full stops, semi colons and commas.
-applause-
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Wow!!!
I love this! I love shilling poems. This has to be one of the best I've ever read. Love the flow and the rhythm. Great job!
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Wow this rattles along at a really good pace, the rhymes are really good and the whole things is awesome, really enjoyable, well done! x take care x
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