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Swirls of passion

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Swirling ribbons of passions fire
Kindled nerve endings burst into fluorescent glow
Sensory overload of touch
Sparks of electrical current flying from finger tips
Eyes melting into pools of wax spilling from candles edge
Interweaved souls of mosaic beauty
Precision movements once one now two in unison
Shattering earth quakes; unstable floods of emotion
Quivers of explosive moans escaping lips
  Smoldering embers now raging heated bliss
Diamond eyes sparkling into crystal pools of serenity
Moist mouth raising goose bumps on ivory flesh
Knowing ecstasy is but a heartbeat away

Author notes

When two people are in love, a simple flickering flame can become a raging fire of burning love.

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  • -Ink Artist-
    February 9, 2007
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    You describe love as so electric and energetic! I love it! Fabulous metaphors used for the heat of love. Great form and great artwork, also. This is a gem! Thanks for your entry and good luck!

    ~Lori


  • paullallady silver member
    February 1, 2007

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    This is brilliantly done. The vivid imagery is electrical, leaping from the page. I love the descriptions that you use:
    "Eyes melting into pools of wax spilling from candles edge
    Interweaved souls of mosaic beauty
    Precision movements once one now two in unison"

    You did a
    terrific job with this one.


  • Maddogk
    February 1, 2007

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    As two bodies melt and mould into one another, Sensually ~ Soulfully.....Wholeheartedly....
    Ahhhh, so emotionally intense is this write...
    I love it .... Has an awe of beauty surrounding it.
    Well done.
    Jeffro

  • Bad Bill
    January 31, 2007
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    Great

    This is terrific, Zoch--passionate, sensual and beautifully penned. A pleasure to read.
    Bill


  • StarEyes
    January 31, 2007

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    *sigh* Oh isn't this just beautiful!!!! So tender and relaxing! and just amazing! What a beautiful piece you have penned here! And yes how romantic, I think I would have to copy and paste this entire piece, if I had to pick out my favorite part. *sigh* Best of luck in the contest!

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