I watch the screen, and in my heart,
I feel it tear a little more apart,
I know it’s useless; we’ll never meet,
Pass you by in the park, a shop or a street,
But I can’t stop dreaming, my heart can’t see,
That you would never look at me.
I see you smile, and butterflies soar,
Each movement you make, I love you more,
Your eyes light up, and you’re looking right at me,
But its pixels on a screen; an image’s all I see.
Inside my mind, hidden tears I cry,
Unseen to the world, my internal sigh.
The movie ends, the credits roll,
You’ve no reason to stay; you’ve played your role,
But just this once, I wish you would,
Hold me in your arms, just wish I could,
Look into your eyes for real, just once,
Touch your hand, stroke your hair, breathe your gentle fragrance
But there's really nothing I could do, or be,
That would open your eyes, and make you see,
That you and I are ‘meant to be’,
Please don’t vanish back in the cliché,
Of the television screen.
Author notes
option 1
lol my tribute to orlando
A contest entry
- Big Screen Love by Lady Eventide.
525 points, ended February 1, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Search for the best AP Poet by wolfcub.
600 points, ended March 1, 2007, 64 entries
Honorable mention
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ah, the woes of falling in love with fictional characters... rofl... seen this sight by the way: http://www.theorlandobloomfiles.com/amusement/paperdoll.html it might prove amusing for you. yes, celebrity worship can be a touchy topic with me... i'm tempted to completely go postal on you for being so silly, and yet at the same time, i still watch Jay Leno just for my favorite celebrity guests, and i do have a pirates of the caribbean calender on my wall, and five or so posters of orlando bloom and others hidden away in my basement and so i suppose i can't... *sigh* at least i don't run around foolishly kissing them anymore... *shaking head* laugh if you must, yes, i went through a phase like that too, though you won't catch me admitting it often...
To the form of the poem, you've done fairly well maintaining the rhyme and flow, and it only falters at the very end. great work, thanks for entering, and best of luck in my contest! -
haha I'm sending it to him!
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Holy Moly-
This is one priceless verse You have penned!
Congratulation on Your trophy win
Beautiful piece that rhymed flawlessly
Made me want to cry~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Loved this one
Many blessings to You Sweetness
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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lol...orlando..love it! lol. good luck in the contest.
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Nicely done... I can see why this won the contest. Short, concise, and it transfers the feelings of "love" (or at least, affection) very well from reality to a movie. Nicely done, though the topic's a bit creepy for me, anyway. Loving a movie star like that... it borders on obssesion, and I've seen some... interesting cases of that.
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Aww! I am definately bookmarking this. I loved how you captured the feeling of hopeless(yet extremely hopeful) love. Really really great poem. Don't dare stop writing!
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Heya... absolutely love the poem - definetely being bookmarked.. I started writing when I was just a bit younger than you..
All I'll say is that you should make shorter sentences.. you use commas a lot and then your sentences kind of go on forever... but if that's what you like doing that's okay..
I was just expressing my opinion.
Good luck with the contest.
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This flows very well.
My favorite part is the beggining, the first to lines are very strong setting the scene and grabbing my attention quickly.
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Nice. All the lives that are lived up on the big screen, and the fantasy weaves into the heart a lore of love, just as it offers a glimmer of hope each time it is watched. I like how you play with the delacate balance of emotion and reality, In this way it feels like an acknowleged fantasy and not a potential stalker. It walks the line just fine. well done.
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'Touch your hand, stroke your hair, breathe your gentle fragrance' This line, although it gave a great effect, was too long. If I were looking only at the form of the poem, I would hate it for this one little 'mistake', however, I am not just lookign at the form, I'm looking at everything! I love it! Loads of emotion and passion and everything else! lovely rhymes, great flow, great rythm. thankyou for entering and good luck!
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GAWD what a beautiful picture to compliment the tremendous poem. I am happy you won gold!! This is a spectacular write and I am happy you even commented on mine
Thanks so much. It felt good to wake up to another trophy this morning! Congrats to you 
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Good job!
Hey, glad you actually used one of the options. I'm also glad that this was so good! Wow. This is definitely a good little day-dreamy poem about one of the best young actors of our time. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
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