Rapture… This does not begin
To convey the love… Nay, so much more.
The euphoria I know with you
But, the wolf is at the door
Oh yes, you are the wolf
And I’m an angel falling
Playing here in raptures fire
I can not hear, the master calling
You lay me down… devour me
On pure skin lashes rain
I’m everything… and nothing
You grant pleasure, wrapped in pain
Your caresses bring me ecstasy
As we howl beneath the moon
Bathed in silver streaks of light
Morning comes too soon.
I lay fallen, washed in blood
Battered, bruised and sore
But I remember rapture
And I hunger… beg for more.
You whisper to me… “Angel”
“Let me feast on you tonight”
I… knowing it is wrong
Convince myself it’s right.
So, I go on accepting
The rapture you impart
First soaring, and then falling
As I give you my heart
The rapture and the bliss
Have seared me to the core
Now I’m an angel fallen
And the wolf is in the door.
Patricia Gibson-Little
July 24, 2001
Author notes
Oh well I couldn't post this in the Angel Contest, so I posted it for fun.
Written July 24th, 2001
In a list
A contest entry
- Impress me by Wolf of Night.
300 points, ended October 12, 2004, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is so rhythmic and erotic; the internal struggle and then the capitulation to your seducer is well-written and you characterized well without being too verbose.
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I loved this. I can see 2 clear interpretations of this. The one being the obvious one. The werewolf story at it's finest but the other, a little more suttle yet much deeper. The seduction of sin, the way it lures you and convinces you that it is ok. This was an amazing write. One that not only brings across clearly more than one interpretation but also brings those images to your mind that you expect with good poetry, AND forces you to feel that certain way the poet intended for you to feel. Well done on this piece.
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Very nice job good flow and rythem. You show the way we rationalize our sins so they seem right. Nicely done!
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wow... not sure what to say to this... you capture so well the idea of being fallen, and of justifying it in the mind, very excellently done
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Loved the flow of this poem. I also loved the fantasy that was incorporated to gloss over the present. Such a nice spin on being with one that isnt yours. Great poem and great job of conveying the message.
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that was...amzing....really...i absoulutely love it.i never write anything that writes because i find it so hard to express my thoughs and Then try and make it ryhme, so i think only real skilled people can rhyme and make it sound good...and you are one of them
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wow , was very very good. really liked this one. although is sad ,I still enjoyed it . *s*
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