I can't remember
the last time I was happy;
even when
I promised (crossed my heart & HOPEd to die)
that just your
voice forming my name
was [[more than]]
enough.
& honey;
I have a secret
that I've probably shown you
in a million different ways,
in a million different places,
at a million different times.
but I think it's time to SAY it
for real & Out.Loud...
I don't think I'll -ever-
see you again.
Author notes
the secret is kinda like... suicide.
yeah, but I'm not actually going to.
or running away.
hope it fits, I was inspired by this contest =]]
A contest entry
- Post Secret::My Secret Inspired *Now Your SECRET!* by Dead Star--x.
350 points, ended February 14, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the form you used. When I see a poem written with parenthasis like that I always tell myself I need to do that but I dont know how to begin!
My favorite part:
I promised (crossed my heart & HOPEd to die)
that just your
voice forming my name
was [[more than]]
enough.
Darkness haunts me also. Even when things are going really great, there is something inside me always insisting on putting a dark spin on it or wanting to focus on the negative. Its a life long fight, but I believe it can be overcome with the right help.
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this was a great write and i can really relate to this and this was so full of pain..your words were strong and powerful and very strong..your very talented keep writting and good luck in the contest
~Chrissy~ -
Wow
I Love This. The Ending Is Perfect. Best Of Luck, Hope You Win! -
Wow, this was powerful.
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thanks for reading!!
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you leave me without words crash
& honey;
I have a secret
that I've probably shown you
in a million different ways,
in a million different places,
at a million different times.
really amazing entry. Goodluck -
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thanks babes
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No problem as always!
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WOWIE. I absolutely adore the ending. I was thinking more along the lines of love. so it caught me by surprise like whoa.
I can't imagine a world without your writing, so.. I was greatly relieved when i read that You WEREN'T thinking about suicide.
That word sounds weird..
Well much love to you.. Keep writing..
I need your words to.. keep me around
love love, Bittie
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awwww Bittie, you deserve a million sloppy slobbery kisses =]]]
I lufff you to death.
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"& honey;
I have a secret
that I've probably shown you
in a million different ways,"
--this is interesting. To show a secret and to show it in different ways is an awesome thought -
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So the secret is that the person is going to commit suicide?
thats really interesting, Its strange thinking your going to do it and not telling anyone I guess- when only you know that you'll never see them again
*hugs and kisses and pretty things*
moonshine
xxx
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oh Good Darling.
I was about to go all Dr. Phil /glitter whore on your
little bum and make you change you mind =]
you're wonderful.
"I promised (crossed my heart & HOPEd to die)
that just your
voice forming my name
was [[more than]]
enough."
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dr. phil is a lunatic.
hehe =] no fears, I'll stick around for a whilllllle.
[can't leave my glitter whores now, can I?]
wow. that's sad. haha, my computer girls are more of a reason than my friends that I can poke in real life.... o.O O.o
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i like it not the ending i expected it offered a plesant surprise! but i do know what you mean, sometimes things just wont ever work out and you have to move... im scared that that will happen to me, but i hope it doesnt cause then id really be lost...
but i do like this, feel better thats its not in your head but also written down.??
thanx for entering!
*Abused
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i like this.
love the ending.
loo0o0o0ove you.
♥
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thanks babe..
[it kinda sucks, but OHHHH WEELLLl =] ]
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