Whenever we kiss,I know what bliss is.
Is there anything better than this is?
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- Can You? [A Challenge Waiting For A Call!!] by crimson rose 247.
500 points, ended February 7, 2007, 9 entries
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Short, Sweet and Simple. I dont know if I like the ending 'this is'. I would have left it at 'this' since repeating to close to another word just makes it seem amateurish. but I loved the idea of it. its like how people tend to over do it with the love, romance and kiss, but in reality everything is really easy when thought on it. in fact things such as these dont need much thought, it is a natural instinct. Thank you for reminding us, and good luck in the competition.
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