The sky spreads out,
Its arms,
Welcome to the night.
A New light,
Has been cast,
Down through
Veiled air,
The mist rises,
They meet,
Dance.
Sharp swords,
Penetrate through,
me,
I breathe,
I ride,
To meet the crying wind.
Tears,
Fall,
Crash.
Shattered,
Reflecting the stars.
The sky spreads out,
Its arms,
Welcome to the night.
A contest entry
- Shades of Night (CONTEST) by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended February 5, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This paints the sadness that can surround us as the night falls. Great imagery! I appreciate you taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Thank you and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der
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(Again welcome to AllPoetry, let me know if you ever need anything-)
Like your poem 'Skinny', this has amazing imagery, but the wording is so subtle and careful that it is not overblown or overdone- I like that, your style is really intriguing.
-Shirley-
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welcome to allpoetry
Very nice.. I like your descriptions. vivid, real ..enough to paint a picture and not too much..leaves a bit of mystery..as the night does/can. I don't think you need all the commas.. interupts the flow a bit (for me). stiull, I enjoyed reading your words. Thank you for sharing. I hope you will continue writing and sharing your thoughts/talent with us all.
~Kristy
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