How can one describe
a rapture of the cosmos?
Yet that is the task assigned
I shall do my best to discern
what miracle occurs when your lips
touch mine
Torturous moments pass
and fall upon the space
that separates one into two,
even as hearts and hands click into place
A wordless need is pulsing-
while we turn the stars grow pale
in comparison to the sea green gems
that cause all logic to fail
Our lashes pointed down,
we embrace to trace masterpieces
across heated skin until
thoughts and passions merge- time ceases
Lightening friction ensues
as our lips tempt all reason
melting, demanding, loving-
as gentle as angels and as fierce as demons
The thousands of “I love you’s”
pour forth from our intertwined
tongues that explore the secrets of ourselves
while our lips continue to insist and find
Tempests rise as our interlude extends-
as we fuse
into some perfect element
Molten at the lips we continue
I am drowning in you
and I do not care
the feeling rising is so intense- I can’t contain it
Alas, we must come up for air
A poem’s lyric is the only one
that can come close
to describing the pleasures of the tongue
There is still so much to tell
but until then, my request is only one
kiss me again…
Please tell me what you think
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i love this one!!!!!
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hehehe. I think that's the longest description of a kiss I've ever read. It was wonderful, though. Describing a kiss isn't easy, by any means, but you did it beautifully and poetically. Your poem flows really well, and is chalk full of imagery. I could picture the whole thing in my mind as I read through it. I think this would make a really sweet Valentine's gift.
Great job! Keep it up.
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wow!! its soo hard to write about a kiss... but reading your piece really made me remember my first kiss... its very touching and my favourite part is...
Lightening friction ensues
as our lips tempt all reason
its soo beautifully penned!
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Sigh. What a romantic work!!
Wow!!
for a die-hard romantic like me, that was a marvellous piece of work!! I loved the way you made it sound like the kiss is able to convey so many different and deep emtotions between the two of you, and it seemed liked it is a fantastic, non-verbal way of conveying your feelings!!
I like the ending, it kinda let your words linger in the air and this effect tie up the poem so nicely!!
that was a great, melodious write!
keep it flowing!
love,
neera
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Thanks for you comment and seeing how the last stanza resonated. In truth the first and last stanzas were more for his eyes than everyone elses'. I think the poem could probably stand on it's own without them. Oh well I'm rambling, again I thank you for your comment.
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Nice Work
This poem is pretty good. I like the line "as gentle as angels and as fierce as demons." I also like the line "even as hearts and hands click into place." The words "hands" and "hearts" sound well placed closely together. The 6th stanza has an intensity to it that works well. -
This is really good--although I think the last stanza is a little unnessisary--I think it would be better ended simply at "Alas, we must come up for air". But you definately captured the essence of a kiss. Good job!
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A overwhelming write so deep
Wow Outstanding write You left me speechless. That was so beautifully written and expressed. I enjoyed it so very much I would like to bookmark this Amazing write with your permission. I love these stances (Lisa)
'The thousands of “I love you’s”
pour forth from our intertwined
tongues that explore the secrets of ourselves
while our lips continue to insist and find
Tempests rise as our interlude extends-
as we fuse
into some perfect element
Molten at the lips we continue"
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woo-woo
So true and romantic. loved it!!!!!
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