Met you at the local bar
It's been such a long time
You still make me laugh till it hurts
Yes, I'm doing fine
Shots of vodka, rum and gin
You're starting to look even better
How'd we get to your place?
Sure, you can take my sweater
Disappearing clothing in minutes flat
Tracing fingertips and liquor-mingled kisses
Make my head spin and body scream
As I realize it's not just my conversation he misses
Falling onto blankets so soft
Clenching sheets so cool
My eyes close and mouth opens
As he tantalizes my naked jewel
My mind reels with questions
Like, why hadn't we done this before?
Why I had overlooked this king of passion
As my body he explored
I arrive in the land of Ecstasy
Taking a right onto Orgasm
Our bodies collapse in unison
I think I felt a spasm
Heavy breathing and relaxation
We fall asleep in utter bliss
I escape early the next morning
Not without a parting kiss
Smiling to myself yet saddened
Because we can never again meet like this
A contest entry
- One night stands by a hopeless case.
420 points, ended February 21, 2007, 18 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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This was a great read here
Love that flow
the rhyme
the thoughts that it brought to mind
Riftkin -
Thank you for entering.
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Not quite what I was looking for. This sounds more like a one night stand, not friends with benefits. Don't get me wrong, it's a good poem, well written with correct grammar and everything, just not quite right for this contest. Thanks for entering though.
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Its pretty funny the way you direct this to him/her while you write the begining of the poem!!
There are lots of powerful parts in this and I like the comparation in line 16 however it didn't capture the strength of love at the same time... It was romantic enough though.
Thank you for entering and good luck in your other contests!!! -
Nicely done
I really enjoyed this one...It was a fun encounter I take...I have had one of those...
I have to agree with the hostess that it would have been nice if it was a little more dirty but I have a traveling mind
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
Much Love
Tessa -
Quite a romantic little one-nighter this. It has a touch of truth in it perhaps. I would have appreciated a bit more dirtiness though.
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