The Hades Hawk sails on seas unseen,
With stars both above and below,
A sailing ship uncommon lean,
And like an arrow sharp and keen,
Across the empty voids she’ll go,
Sailing across many a blue sky,
Caught on unseen, solar flow,
Where she’s going none may know,
It is no wave that makes her fly,
Rather the stars’ cold light,
Under who’s flame, planets die,
While she goes sailing by.
A ship of death, a ship of night,
A ship that sails the stars,
Her silver hull gleaming bright,
Her sails of gold, not white.
The Hades Hawk has no spars,
No mast, or deck, or figurehead,
Her brig is devoid of doors or bars,
Her hull round, reflects the stars,
Oh and many a chase she’s led,
Across the void of deep space,
Many are her battles, many are her dead,
The heavens her world, the void her bed,
The Hades Hawk is fast to the race,
Her solar sails full and streaming,
She’ll every time, take first place,
A speeding arrow on the chase,
Across the sky she flies, gleaming,
And where she goes I cannot say,
Nor can I perceive her scheming,
Like a comet she passes, fleeting,
In stars she was born, in stars, she’ll stay
In the depths of deepest space,
Though she be seen once more one day,
Again she’ll anchor up and away,
And ne’er will you see her captain’s face,
Or who her crew may be,
For such privilege is not your place,
To understand this ship of space.
By Analexii (Cassidy R. Scaglione)
Author notes
I wrote this because Beyondsonic challenged me to. so well, yes, i did my best, and if you don't like it... tell me WHY THE HELL NOT?!?!?!
A contest entry
- Prewrites Galore and Nothing More by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended February 22, 2007, 66 entries
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Comments
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Getting a little vicious are we? I do like it, so don't karate chop my head off or anything. The only thing is, I feel you use an excessive amount of punctuation. If you want them, keep them, but I feel they disrupt the flow when the end of every line doesn't need them. I really enjoyed your poem, thanks for entering, and good luck.
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Cute. I can almost see this as a poetic summary to a longer prose work, perhaps... just has the feel of the start of something more epic.
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bravo!
A neat and nifty and just a wonderful poem...the first stanza is excelllent as it really pulls the reader in...bravo...bravo...bravo...
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Niiiiiiiice!!!!
EXCELLENT discription!! I like the technology ideas in it, like the solar sailing, and the hull discription.
you discribed the stars, which is something sci-fi writers miss at times, the background of the ship.
very awsome, out of this world. even the rhyme pattern i find awsome. great job, exellently done, and thanx for accepting the challenge! you win!
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