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A Dangerous Mind

Living with you ... I've had to fight to survive
I'm existing with a mystery, in darkness you thrive

That stern look in those icy cold eyes
Make me feel as though me you despise

I go to sleep each night no knowing what you'll do
Will you let me live, or with me are you through?

Please don't stare at me in such a way
Tears are welling as you lead me astray

Please let me go, and let my skin have breath
Do you truly hate me...are you leading me to my death?

I would have never told you yes at all
If only I had known that your mind would fall

I never wanted to live in a way so blind
Who would have known of your dangerous mind?

Tell me what cha think! :)

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  • nilav
    February 11, 2007
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    very good poem...the smooth flow of words with the rhyme makes it more beautiful...


  • WayWithWords
    February 8, 2007

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    Nice

    This poem is very neat...almost like a kidnapping (though I know that's not what's intended) Good conclusion and I love the last 3rd from last stanza. Nice job on this and thanks for all your comments!
    PoeticThunder*


  • going nowhere
    January 31, 2007

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    Reading this left me with goosebumps. The danger is some relationships is real and having to live through that can be deadly. Thanks for getting those emotions through to readers.