A normal teenage Girl,
Has many negative thoughts running her their head,
"I want to be beautiful"
"I want to be dead"
"I wish didn't have to chose"
"I wish my friends were here"
"I hate not helping people I care about"
"I hate looking at myself in the mirror"
"What if I'm a bad kisser?"
"What if I'm not pretty enough?"
"I know I'm not perfect, and never will be"
"I know I'm not tough"
Unfortunately for me,
I have a teenage girls mind.
I've searched and searched,
but answers I couldn't find.
Don't get me wrong,
Teenage girls have many positive thoughts too,
But that part must have skipped over me,
Thoughts like that to me are long-overdue.
Anyways the point of this poem,
Is to announce that I have a Teenage girls head!
It’s just missing some nice thoughts,
but what difference will it truthfully make when I’m dead?
Author notes
... I reaalllyy don't know how this poem came about.. but aannyywwayyss I guess its true...
Tell the truth now:
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Great write! I can't really say all that goes on in my head but in a lot of other young ladies, yes and it was beautifully described! Once agian, amazing flow and rhymes throughout.
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hmm, well, i am a teenager still, but i cant relate.. sorry. but actually people say i have a mind of a 20 year old..so maybe its just me and not the world? sounds truer. thanks for sharing. -eleno
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THis is a great write you wrote here, all teenage girls have alot of thoughts running around in their head and some they wish could be simply answered, you just have to wait and your questions will be answered eventually. I remember myself as a teen thinking the same thing. Your penned a beautiful write here, have patients your questions will be answered in time
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Wow, this poem is sooooo true! Being a teenager sucks. I really liked the flow and rhyme of this. Great job! Keep up the good work! Oh and thanks for your comment.
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well this really hits the point hard
it gets it across u no it was a really good poem
put together well and the flow was awesome
my fave part was
"Unfortunately for me,
I have a teenage girls mind.
I've searched and searched,
but answers I couldn't find.
Don't get me wrong,
Teenage girls have many positive thoughts too,
But that part must have skipped over me,
Thoughts like that to me are long-overdue."
because it is so true
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Aha! you know it! true as true can be. well anyways thankz for the comment, I really appreciate it!
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of course this true i've thought this to i have it' happens a lot a least for me great write keep it up
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well done, indeed. This is a sad piece and I pray nice thoughts find their way to you soon.
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Well done -pawn-
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At the moment, I'm too sleep to think straight... but I'll try my best ^^
So far, this first poem I read from you is very nice ^^ Teenage mind huh? We all have our own worries. Sadly I wasn't able to experience the social life of a teenager not to the fullest, but at least I had fun while I went through my school life with friends ^^ Had some parties here and there with good friends, but never really anything as crazy as your parties Carrie
And I'll never take a beer too nasty 
hehe
Keep on writing and post up those new poems you lazy bum! ^.^
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lol thx ^_^ and yeah my parties can get out of control, but meh its fun and ill post them before i leave for Europe.. .. and i cant help being an lazy bum lol Luv yew and thx for the comment
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Very true
This poem I can relate to in a few different ways. A lot of those thoughts run through my head at times.
Like misskylee said, lines 5 and 6 need revising, but other than that, I really like it!
Keep writing! I look forward to reading more!
XxXKaela
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Thankz for the comment. I think i may have fixed lines 5 and 6. You were right, when i read it outloud, it just didnt flow. I changed the wording a bit:
"I wish didn't have to chose"
"I wish my friends were here"
"i hate not helping people I care about"
"I hate looking at myself in the mirror"
do you think it sounds better? If not, do you have any ideas of how i can fix it?
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Look at lines 5 & 6. Other than that its really good. A great topic to write about.
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