The wind howling, hollow ululations
Edge of a cliff, edge of a blade
Black velvet sky
White diamonds above
Patches of lights, far far below
Visions of a life, only perceived
Happiness amongst those in that innocence
But darker emotions still linger
On this cliff I am safe
From emotions, below me
I am alone on this precipice
With stars as my friends
So close they appear
But just out of reach
Memories banished, the list incomplete
What emotion still clings to me yet?
The cold empty wind echoes in my mind
And the numbness answers for me
I am still …
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H O L L O W
. . .
S c a r e d
. . .
a l o n e
In banishing all without forgiveness
I have condemmed my own peaceful demise
Author notes
This is one huge metaphor and it describes a way of thinking I have, how once you lose all of your mortal attachments- emotions, material, memories -and the character in the poem has done this without making peace, and thus as she tried to banish emotions instead of peace she feels empty, alon, and scared.
So the message/ theme in this is make peace, don't cast away.
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- Window to the Soul by Shiro Okami.
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The cold empty wind echoes in my mind
i love that part! this poem is awsome! great job! -
[[sits at desk like an old lady with legs crossed and starts moving her foot in that weird way that those professors do when they're criticizing you]] Yes yes my lovely Kelsey my dear. I really do - OH MY GOD EW. Sorry, I just took a sip of my coke and it was all nasty and watered down. Bah. Anyway! I like this :] Like I don't know. [You know fuck because when it comes to stuff you write I never freaking know.] Just the feel it creates and the stuff [what stuff, I'm not sure, sorry :/ I'm hating myself over this] and I liked the playing with the words there with the 'hollow', 'scared', and 'alone.' Schweet shizzle there. Nice job :] Good luck in teh contest yo shizzle.
[[[This is random but you should know, if you talk to David - er no, if you talk to Val, you're warned. She's very much pissed off, David lost his wedding band. Bah. Idiot.]]]
Iluffsyous! I plan on calling you tomorrow and forcing you to talk to me >.> Ahahh. I hope you feel better.
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This is good. Best of luck. Well done.
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